The day I stop dreaming

 

 

The day I stop dreaming

     is when I started my progress…

 

I never really understood why, oh why

               do we have to start a living?

                 

In the city of progress, I became the mindless puppet

     Of what we call ‘the clichés of society’

 FOR NOW - I’m totally blind in all five senses

    to where my love should be place in…

 

From a specific today, I am robbed for my silence

 Totally alone never wanted nor even needed

Conceivably A misplaced person in a ‘crazy world ’

     - or it is just me who thinks that way or this way.

 

Sometimes I would think no one would ever really captured

                          - ‘the essence of my heart’

Or probably it was just me, who never did take noticed.

Guessing I am too

  - Perverse to feel anything within the walls of my five senses.

 

Despite everything else, I understood how society lives by.

The imaginable ways it burdens and pleasure in -

Giving " Receiving " Showing -  us how life works in their walls.

 

I could never blame how our world becomes a harsh place,

Yet I could took the blame on US

   or our humanity is too faulty consecutively.

Too many Securities from any Insecurities.

Walls upon Wall of their Owning Glory,

      Almost nothing is free.

 

So I stand chained from cultural responsibilities,

                      for we were made to think this way.

 

Ashamed of what I discovered

So I hide in the covers of my pen

To write, just write,

A written voice for the fallen..

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

credits to the image
puppets of society by x-vegan-x

Reviews

[gabrielle]

“So I stand chained from cultural responsibilities, for we were made to think this way.”

This piece is like a confessional poetry pax. My take is that if we want to live in comfort, we must also bear the corresponding sacrifice. After all, there’s nothing free in this world anymore (unless of course, if we want to live in the boondocks and completely isolate ourselves from the rest of the world). What I observe in our culture is that we sometimes set aside our dreams to give priority to what we perceive as greater/nobler purpose: the welfare of our loved ones.

[Pax]

thank you so much Gab, that is one of the reason I stop dreaming big, we do of what we must in-betterment of what's right for our family...

[gabrielle]

kahit minsan inuuna natin yung tingin natin na immediate concern kaysa sa dream natin, i think dapat wag naman natin itong kalimutan kasi for self-fulfillment yun atsaka kasi darating din yung time na ma-achieve natin yun. i think pag mas marami tayong process na pinagdaanan before achieving our dreams mas ma-appreciate natin lahat ng blessings na darating sa atin.

[Pax]

Thank you, Gab, reminders ko na yan sa sarili ko...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the subject matter and the picture does justice for this verse...
I would clear certain areas in the beginning...for clarity:

I never really understood to why, oh why
do we have to start a living?
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I never really understood why, oh why
do we have to start living?

but as this write went on...unfolds quite well for the reader...
the usage and style of your words to define certain places...
adds to the defining moments of this piece...
in a society that we live in...the world is structured in a way...
that like robots --- we become programmed to the everyday...
not taking into account for ourselves --- what propaganda can do...
as the illustration does much to put this altogether...

[Pax]

thank you so much good friend, sir Glen... always a pleasure hearing your thoughts and suggestion, after i finished writing this piece and when i did search and image for it, I found that my assumption is not alone in this matter, that many do see this kind of life we lived in... another realization for me... its a pleasure to hear you thoughts about it... and you are right on that spot, i think :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Television gives the best example...you see the perfect picture...edited and re-edited to give the Ideology of a perfect world...with no war --- no diseases --- nothing will effect you...you live in a bubble world after all...let's just be happily ever after...like flying unicorns and Cloud 9 utopia...no one will dare invade us from the outside...get rid of all the bombs and guns...we do not need them to defend ourselves...just fly about like little butterflies...and smoke some fun stuff and eat mushrooms all day...I think you get what I mean...of course...you way up and the other side does not agree with you and takes over the world and suppress those weaknesses and gains control again...stop smell the roses...people...life is not edited... and put on television...even Reality TV is edited to fit the scene...

[Shep]

Hey Pax i agree where you are coming from. sometime wonder regarding to days world we all have lost this and have become mindless puppets a carbon copy of one self. Nicely put by the way.

[Pax]

hey good friend, it is nice to see you... I am glad felt the same way on our society now a days... always so great to see yah.. thank you very much.