Perhaps

Reviews

[Extant]

I really like this, the whole poem reminds me of the human race in terms of actually racing, especially the last two lines. Not knowing where you are among the runners; are you first, last, average. But it's lonely in the front, 'a step ahead in my foolish play', 'perhaps you never know my distance'. Really great write, Pax.

[writ rajat]

I really like this, the whole poem reminds me of the human race in terms of actually racing, especially the last two lines. Not knowing where you are among the runners; are you first, last, average. But it's lonely in the front, 'a step ahead in my foolish play', 'perhaps you never know my distance'. Really great write, Pax. Breath-taking - in the world of 'perhaps' - we mortals shall perpetually wonder about the 'perhaps' of many possibilities... I thoroughly relished your verse. CheersPax,
I really like this and you know you are not alone and this whole earthly life is a charade they say it's a holographic world. so while we are here I'm glad to say we are all blessed to have each other.
For now we all ride our bikes and try to get to the same place from our different trails and perspectives.
Your pretty Kool And We All Love You ! Thanks for Loving usPerhaps, my dear brother, you are biking before your thoughts... :) I loved this analogy!
And riding, after them... you balance well, standing in the middle, still, feeling the need
of real rest and embrace your flaws, like that's the best way to deal with them.
I do it too, myself, why should I be in the middle of things? when I feel I can't bring a thing?
And when I can bring a thing, I try to bring it good... but rather from the sidelines... like you.

I think you are a brilliant mind my sweet one.
You should give yourself more love, and happiness.. :) for you
are really worth the ride. Plus to have a pause, and drink a smootie,
or eat something good... and have a good thoughtful talk... :)

Well written poetry here. One to ponder... always with you! :)
((HUG))

- Sis xThis is the first piece of yours i've read and I am quite impressed. There is such a deep sense of pain and disappointment in your words as the emotions flow. So many hide their true selves, wearing a mask, living behind a facade for whatever reason. It is only us, the true individual of our existence who understands the "real" us...stay true to yourself dear sweet Pax, you have a beautiful honest heart and soul.

[Blood Ink Diary]

Breath-taking - in the world of 'perhaps' - we mortals shall perpetually wonder about the 'perhaps' of many possibilities... I thoroughly relished your verse. Cheers

[Cryingkate]

Pax,
I really like this and you know you are not alone and this whole earthly life is a charade they say it's a holographic world. so while we are here I'm glad to say we are all blessed to have each other.
For now we all ride our bikes and try to get to the same place from our different trails and perspectives.
Your pretty Kool And We All Love You ! Thanks for Loving us

[Sami Khalil]

An awesome poem Pax with its simplicity and rhyming scheme. You always amaze me with your talent. Not everything has to be hard for people to love and enjoy. I love your honesty and humbleness when you write from the heart. In my library...:)..................

[Cryingkate]

Much agree

[Sami Khalil]

:)...........................

[Cryingkate]

PAX W/C New Dragon Slayer ! LOL

[Pax]

not that much, haha, i smile at this new dragon slayer thingie... :)
thanks my good friend...

[Cryingkate]

You are a Dragon Slayer, Bravely and Courageously withstood and shielded the Hot Breaths of a Dragon, Most of us crawl into a cave.

[Baby Ricochet]

This one's loaded with existential angst. Great write MR PAX.

[Pax]

Thanks, always, my good friend...

[Relic]

Wow, I'm a little surprised at Mr. Vaillancourt's comment. If you don't like something than simply pass it up. There's no reason to assault a writer like that.

As for the poem, some of us, for some reason or the other, feel out of step with society. That's normal whether you are originally from this country or not and it can result in a lonely existence. Finding your way takes time and effort. But eventually, we can find a balance and a bit of happiness.

[Pax]

actually i am not that surprise with his action, i already know mr. chris is like that.
i am a bit surprise in the used of inappropriate tone/language...

thanks much my friend. I wish those content happiness to be achieved someday...
I appreciate this very much.

[Relic]

I blocked him a long time ago when he flooded my read requests and barely reviewed anything of mine. He seems to have some real bad mood swings. You're welcome pax.

[Pax]

Perhaps, my dear brother, you are biking before your thoughts... :) I loved this analogy!
And riding, after them... you balance well, standing in the middle, still, feeling the need
of real rest and embrace your flaws, like that's the best way to deal with them.
I do it too, myself, why should I be in the middle of things? when I feel I can't bring a thing?
And when I can bring a thing, I try to bring it good... but rather from the sidelines... like you.

I think you are a brilliant mind my sweet one.
You should give yourself more love, and happiness.. :) for you
are really worth the ride. Plus to have a pause, and drink a smootie,
or eat something good... and have a good thoughtful talk... :)

Well written poetry here. One to ponder... always with you! :)
((HUG))

- Sis x

[Pax]

big sis, your understanding is vast and wide, and it is so you, like I always knew you well. Thank you... You knew me so well, I always do appreciate having you as part of my wc family, big sis... I am glad you journey with me, that i don't feel nothing or alone... being such a loner, perhaps i always understand, that sometime i think the outside world does misunderstood me... but in all that I stay silent, then let the world them win, anyways I am just nothing...sigh.. i should stop thinking this way... i am worth something in some way, i think, like you said your worth the ride... thank you big sis, it comforts me knowing that...

[Shep]

I like the poem,even though I was confused by the second lines. But the rest I understand completely. Normally I would read this to night. But. Since I have nothing to do as our new SUV is finishing being done I said why the hell night.

[Pax]

Thank you Shep... I am glad you are reading this...