Infinity

- infinity, forever, philosophical pondering, inner child introspection

 

 

“Have you thought about it?”

About what?

“How the sky and sea meet?”

                                      I haven’t really put much thought on it…

                                      Why are you asking?

            Didn't you think they don’t meet at all?

                                      There’s a huge distance between them, you know.

“I see otherwise.

Look far beyond this sea

And see the high depths of the sky.

Do you think they collide?”

                                        Ahh, very nice observation young one.

             And yeah, I think somehow they do.

“Now, do you think both are reaching out?”

                                         No, I don’t think so.

“The serene pristine sea is at the brink of nothing.”

      You say such trivial things, young one.

“Do you think there is serenity on the edge of infinity?”

      Young one…

      Infinity runs immensely in unending cycle.

      Either way, it can be chaotic, in order, or tranquil

      It really depends on how you look at it.

      If you want peace, you can attain the infinity of peace.

      If you want chaos, you can attain the infinity of chaos.

      And so on…

      And to think, infinity has no edge, no end…

“Really?

Then to me, infinity is a sad place.”

      Why is that young one?

“I don’t want the same thing over and over.

I don’t want forever.

I don’t want to live an infinite life.

A lifetime is enough for me.”

      We are not immortals, young one.

                                           Remember that…

      We are mortals who have limits.

      Infinity is just a mere thought of something.

      Something that keeps on repeating.

      Like you keep on reaching to achieve nothing.

                                           Or so I think it is.

“But don’t you think, there is something out of nothing?”

      I do believe there is…

“I am tired, but I don’t want to sleep.”

      Why is that young one?

“I am afraid I’ll fall into deep eternal slumber.”

      Hahaha!

      You are funny, young one.

      I had just told you.

      We are not immortals.

      We don’t journey an eternal walk.

      Our journey always does have an end.

      We live and die, the natural cycle of us - humans.

There is a silver lining between a dream and reality,

so think wisely.

But that doesn't mean we can't achieve anything by dreaming.

Some of us find ways to make - dreams into reality.

*yawn*

“Now I know, that is good.

Goodnight!”

      Goodnight, young one.

Author's Note

Credits to the photo:
escape by Jericho

just as you know the photo chosen was a complete coincidence to what i just wrote... I already finished this piece before I found the photo that matched the storyline. And I do think it really adds up to the depth of the story pondering of my inner child....

enjoy!
thank you for reading my work.

Reviews

[Dhaye]

Let me state first my interpretation and REACTION on this piece, bro.


As I read the piece, I found out that this is just a continuation of the poem I just read this morning which is a conversation of the inner child to the adult self. The concept captivated my interest because of the title itself. You know, "Infinity" is such a "controversial" word when it comes to relationships...as it also reflects in the word "forever". There are some who do not believe in such word. Why not? A person would make a promise to be there "forever" only to find out that tomorrow he/she could be saying the same thing to another person. Funny that the word forever would only mean "now" or "today" or "tonight" or "at this moment". But time has its own people...and people has their own time. People are not the same. If some have made a different color in that word...that instead it could bring HOPE and FAITH, it would only broken TRUST between two people....there are still who believe in the true sense of using the word "forever". And that is what I hoped for...and I want to believe...because I trust the person.


Now, going back to the poem's structure, I like the way you presented it. I have no doubt that you mastered different styles in presenting your piece...which I admire about you as a writer...which I want to try also. Haha! At least in little ways, you are my mentor, baby brother. LOL.
There are some fine lines especially when the adult self discusses the meaning of infinity. I don't have any reaction with it.


But look at these lines:


"Don’t you think they collide?”
Ahh, very nice observation young one.
And yeah, I think they do.
“Don’t you think both are reaching out?”
No, I don’t think so.


First off, this is a conversation...a dialogue...how come you forgot to use quotation marks to the lines of the adult self? It's for the whole poem...I mean.

As to the meaning of those lines...TO COLLIDE means "to crash or to bump into"...

""Don’t you think they collide?”
Ahh, very nice observation young one.
And yeah, I think they do.

When the adult self admitted that the sea and the sky collide..that means he believe that they crash or bump into each other to be one for a moment or some moments.


Now, examine these following lines:

"“Don’t you think both are reaching out?”
No, I don’t think so.


It is better if the question starts with the (positive) "Do" instead of (negative)"Don't"...like
"“Do you think both are reaching out?” which is to be answered with a "No, I don’t think so."

These lines mean that the adult self don't believe that both are making ways to reach out to each other...which is a contradiction to the previous lines...UNLESS you really meant there is "they collide or they are fighting as in striking each other" so the adult doesn't believe if they are extending their arms to support each other. So which of the two? At least I have two meanings here. Hehe.

Here...

“But don’t you think, there is something out of nothing?”
I do believe there is…

“But don't you think, there is something out of nothing?”
I do THINK there is…
*Know that any answer must depend on the given question.

Since from the preceding lines, the younger self is so smart in asking questions...why not in this part, you add another follow up question about that "something out of nothing"? It seems that it is only something not relevant which you can take out from the piece...UNLESS you add some lines which will make those lines conform with the concept of INFINITY. Parang naligaw lang sya na tanong nong bata. Hehe. After that..you see...the child is tired already. LOL

You can also say "Our journey has always an end" instead of saying "Our journey always does have an end."

The photo is perfect for the piece! I really like it. It shows that the sea and the sky are both reaching out which is again not compliant with the line "No, I don't think so."

But anyway, in general, this is a very interesting piece- interesting title, nice presentation, perfect photo, nice font used, word choice, and nice author. LOL

Peace be with you, bro! Ice, please... =)

[Pax]

I guess it is somehow a continuation, because I’ve used the same characters of the previous one. So I guess it is a yes for continuation. :)

You know my friend, in relationship, in my understanding, is just like food, it doesn’t last forever, it will eventually rot if not refrigerate for a certain time and not taken well cared for. We’ve been using forever for quite a long time, it adds a romantic feeling to our confessions or love expression. You know I am just being practical and seeing reality at that time when I said forever is not the right word to give your love one but a life time is the right word for it. Still I am not saying that you can’t use that word… it is still the right romantic word for someone you love. Forever might meant a certain time or moment, in that matter you are right..

About the quotation marks, you noticed it is not applied in the adult’s dialog, you see I did that on purpose, not only to separate the child’s dialog and the adult, but also to emphasize that the child is the deeper consciousness of the adult. Because the child was the one who just pops out of nowhere, to start a conversation…

Now, I edited it. And to explain the colliding and reaching out. The child is throwing trivial questions on which is much deeper pretty friend. He throws questions after the other to another again. That is why “something out of nothing” was added to the throwing of question. And didn’t you see, it has a relation to the trivial word the child throws to the adult - “The serene pristine sea is at the brink of nothing.”

Pretty friend, this piece has/have much deeper meaning to me, the child in me just throws some trivial questions and words… somehow this piece – infinity, the child questions that and also comparing it to other things like lifetime, nothingness, and etc…

I hope I have explained myself clear if not question away, fire away..lol
Thanks so much pretty friend, I really, really enjoyed this review…

[Dhaye]

.............. :) Haba. Pang-review rin ang dating. Pang-top reviewer talaga sya. LOL

[The Spirit Chaser]

Pursuit of everything and nothing, infinity and limits. It makes you think... Very deep. I like that it's written in the form of a dialogue.

[Marie]

I do believe the shoreline and the skyline make up a sort of infinity. And I don't think it's sad at all. For within infiniity are infinite possibilities...

[Pax]

ahh Marie my friend, if that happens, I wish to have a reset button on my brain and heart - endless possibilities tires us down for a certian big amount of time spent on it. NEver ending can be too much for our hearts. Thank you so much marie for your very profound review as always....

[gabrielle]

The conversation reminded me of The Little Prince.

As we grow up and gain knowledge we somehow loss our sense of imagination and creativity as delve on the more practical side of life. Likewise this reminded me of my inquisitive niece when she asked: How come that Jose Rizal's nickname was "Pepe". i was caught off guard as i don't know the answer. I tried to recall my history lessons and could not remember having discussed such thing. Then i almost choked when she blurted out that: Maybe he was given that nickname because he came out from the "pepe." (Lol). Deep reflection, Pax.

[Pax]

Oh, now I must have that little book, I have heard about this book a few many times, and still haven't read it completely... its a timeless classic.. thanks Gab... I'll be sure to remember that...

haha, pwede rin... now I think na maalala ko na talaga yan sa tuwing may pangalng pepe...LOL

Like mr. Jacob said, in their simplicity, they are so deep in question...

thanks so much...

[Dhaye]

Sali ako dito ha? LOL. Gab, you're silly! I real your whole review with the aim to know the reason why "Pepe" is Rizal's nickname...only to find out...yun daw..ano dawwwwwww? Hehe. Nagpaka-serioes ako sa itaas...nangungulit naman dito si Gab. Miss ko na uli ang kulitan...

[Dhaye]

Susme...antok na yata mga daliri ko kagabi.
Typo: real= read, serioes= serious
Tsk tsk!

Holiday now, Gab. Enjoy!

[Pax]

hehe, segoro naalala mo yung lesson mo, anong nickname ni rizal..?

[Dhaye]

LOL. Pwede Spanish na lang? =) Good eve, bro!

[Pax]

haha, segi try mo, ano? :D

[Dhaye]

LOL. Hindi ako pumapatol sa unchallenging na hamon na yan... Smile na lang..... :)

[gabrielle]

I am silly. Ayoko seryoso. LOL. And a proud Tita kasi outside the box mag-isip ang pamangkin. Kahit hindi related sa poem yung anecdote basta na lang shinare.
Academic student lang ang kasali sa holiday. so unfair!!!

[Dhaye]

Ahaha! Inggit si Neneng sa holiday ko. =)

Yung review ko sa taas...hamon ni Pax yun...kaya sineryoso ko. Pero ayaw ko na ulit mag-review ng mahahaba. Time-consuming. Hehe. Mabuti pang mangulit, masaya ka pa, malayo ka pa sa sakit. =)

[Pax]

haha, nakakatuwa naman... :D

okay nga eh, na challenge ka. bakit ano naman ang ikasasakit mo sa mahabang review... ulo..? LOL
akala ko ba sasabihin mo yung nickname ni rizal in spanish, gawing mo nlng spanish yun pepe...haha

[gabrielle]

lol. kaya malakas loob ko sabihin yan kasi di nila alam yun...spanish ka jan pax...baka macensored pa.

[Dhaye]

Puro mga nagsasalitang mata ang kausap ko ngayong gabi? What a night! Hak hak!

[gabrielle]

nangungusap na mata...hahaha. ikaw? ano ba yang avatar mo? di ko maintindihan. LOL. kailangan ko yata magnifying glass. lol

[Pax]

hahaha....mga mata na nagungusap.. parang bruha ba..haha. medyo lang.hehe kidding...
ano ba yan di pala na send yung reply ko kanina, kala ko e-censored na ako ni lola este pretty friend...

[gabrielle]

I am the light of the world. You people come and follow me. Follow and love you'll learn the mystery of what you can do and you can be. lol. kanta yan..ewan ko kung tama lyrics.

[Dhaye]

Magaling ka mag-memorize...yun na yun! Alam ko kung bakit...LOL.
Nagmemo-plus gold ka di ba? Hehe

[Pax]

haha, ano bang kanta yun, send mo nga yung mv niya gab...

[gabrielle]

mv? ano yun? sorry laking gubat kausap nyo. lol..memo plus gold? di ba pang dual citizen yun?

[Pax]

hahaha, music video..hehe.. baka dual citizen ka na gab..;D

[Dhaye]

THE LIGHT

I am the light...I am the light...come follow me
I'll show you what is meant by the light, you will see

If ever things were different from your eyes, I shall show
But it's for you to learn, it's for you to know

I'll be just by your side and nothing but to love
To share all what I know, to share all that I have

I am the light...I am the light...come follow me
I'll show you what is meant by the light, you will see...

----Dhaye

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like the style of this one, incorporating the conversation between the adult and the child, and how at times it is hard to decipher which is which.
children ask the strangest questions sometimes and often the hardest...but they also sound more philosophical and insightful than the parents...

in their simplicity, they are so deep.