Blood Soaked

- being the ugly, being the lose end, sore loser... dark poetry

Blood soaked hands in the land where I am forgotten

-   The ugly amongst the fallen.

I am the coward amongst the monster.

My plea for strength didn’t matter,

For every challenge I get weaker.

More scared than I was, so I hide fast.

 

As I flee, never did I enjoy any glee.

Freedom is not free.

In this land I bleed with my creed.

Stupid me!

 

Yet I don’t mind, I am just one of the foolish kind.

Author's Note

a bit of wordplay with hidden meaning.
Perhaps the hidden meaning on this is my past bad experienced.

credits to the photo goes to:
manuelestheim
week 8 On surviving

Reviews

[KAin]

This is an impressive piece of writing.

It breeds a dozen interpretations, as well as curiosity to your true intent and what this experience was that you've alluded to.
What I gathered from it is the need to live a life of meaning, only to have it denied again and again by life itself, by those around us. Remembering that we can be strong, that we have power on our own can sometimes be a very difficult thing... particularly when faced with the endless grinding sensation of the passing of days - when holding on to things of value becomes harder to do, merely by the act of living in a depraved world.

"Freedom is not free" - indeed, the things worth fighting for always have a price... sometimes requiring a darkening of one's own soul.

This poem reminds me of the quote:

"The world breaks everyone and afterward many are strong in the broken places. But those that will not break it kills. It kills the very good and the very gentle and the very brave impartially. If you are none of these you can be sure it will kill you too but there will be no special hurry."
-Ernest Hemingway, "A Farewell to Arms"

The last line -though tinged a little with the colours of despair -speaks regardless of a determination to keep on being what you are, an admirable decision.

Keep up the good work, Pax

[Shep]

very true and very impressive, Such strong emotions that stir the soul.

[Sami Khalil]

Although the title draws some dark conclusions but this poem in its entirety bleeds truth of our minds and our human conditions. The fool tries the same things to find different results but the wise tries different things to get the true results. You are a wise man although you are being humble about yourself which is commendable. Since I have known you , you have tried different things and achieved the great results we are witnessing today from your wor(s).
Thank you for sharing all...:)..........

[Pax]

receiving such complement, Sami my friend its an honor, we've been friends for quite some time now, I know you well as much as you now me.I feel honored to have such friend. I shall be back to your works...thank you so much...

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. The honor is mine. Any time. You are welcome...:).......................

[asdarkeyesclose]

'I am the coward amongst the monster.'

dark, very powerful, very emotional. dark, but for all that one of your best, just hugely original in the way it is set on the page and the highlighted words added to the sense of vision. you truly write from the heart and your work is inspirational. fantastic.

[Tate Morgan]

better to stand for something even if you are wrong than to do nothing

[gabrielle]

The title alone could evoke eerie and haunting feel.
You effectively presented person’s negative perception of himself. This line got my attention: “My plea for strength didn’t matter". Even if we pray or beg or plea 24 hours a days, we will not be able to develop the strength we needed if we keep on fleeing or hiding. i agree with you that freedom is not free. well done pax.

[NeiL ArandA]

Quennie got your thoughts and what your trying to convey . Anything that we want and hope for comes at a cost . We work and fight hard for it .With our own sweat and blood . And how many times we get beaten down we still rise up to the test . We don't succumbed to our weaknest and inferiority but we find comfort and solitude to little things that reminds us who we really are .Though sometimes as have the tendency to underestimate ourselves but we're in fact are strong from the inside because we know our humble beginnings and we know how to get by even with just little and simple things ... Very nice Pax . I see your unique writing style . Its Revolutionary in my personal opinion .

[Frieda P]

Darkly intriguing, effectively potent read here Pax...chilling and relatable, we all think the jokes on us some days. Past experiences manifest in our psyche, hidden perhaps, you never know when it'll rise from the depths to rear it's ugly head. Enthralling write my friend. Kudos!

[Caradoc]

Profound.

This piece speaks to me on a very deep level.

Every time I read your works you have gotten better. Well done is an understatement, my friend.

-Caradoc

[Tennessee]

"I am the coward amongst the monster". I love that line and it's bold statement. This is awesome kid, great. We always want to find fault with others but sometimes we only have ourselves to blame. The truth may hurt sometimes but at least it is always honest.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am a fool also then, because i bleed because of my beliefs, because of my stubborness to live as i see fit, and not matter what i am okay with that. Just as that song lyric goes. "you bleed just to know you're alive"---