heavy heart #1

heavy heart #1

A Poem by Pax
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* part 1

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Which is heavier, my body or this heart of mine?

 

The quantity of the heart is much harder to reassure.

Life is full of assumptions and depressing pressures.

Undecided but I’m riding the ocean waves.

Instinct is my driven force, wanting to be brave.

 

I walk in a road where the path has a dead glow.

I kiss the shadow of nothing, to endure - I bow.

Obedient as I am, the ocean is my starting point, down below

       to where I creep and swim in slow-mo.

 

My feet had grown cold doing what he has been told.

The needy feeling had gone old.

 

I open my heart to go bold.

Just another piece of my life unfolds.

© 2014 Pax


Author's Note

Pax
Photo credits:

Week 27 - I Was A Heavy Heart To Carry
by
anuelestheim

This is the first of the series of poems I made this week.

a series of the heart & Mind:
1. ) Heavy Hear #1
2. ) Vast Space #2
3. ) Silent Scream #3
4. ) ~ Land of Poets ~

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Such a piece of art... the photo, drawn to gravity, as the body and the words, both make a heaviness of the realm. (but beautiful) there is pain in your words, that always bring the best art above. So admire that. "waiting to be brave?" he? I don't get that line, you "ARE" already, by posting it bro. Many can't are struck in their neurotic silent realms, you are just opening here, opening up. That's courage! uh, nothing but courage!!!!

"Obedient as I am, the ocean is my starting point, down below
to where I creep and swim in slow-mo."

What a beautiful line full of deep thought, as deep an ocean can be, and as we tend to be both water signs, it's you that keeps the head up in this... slo-mo, speaks for "being aware" of that moment, of below ness. You are aware you are swiming slow-mo, so you control your dreamy mind, in thought, to realisation. I know deeply the metaphor is related to your beautiful country and all that is happening there, my heart is with you and yours.

Know I'm on the other side of the world, but my heart is Asian, and living and loving each happening.
Please "let the feeling get "OLD" so you can be there in your beyond ages, and future still for your folk"
You're an artist people need to read, need to live by. You did the best you could with this astonishing write, to reach out, not only for yourself, but for any human being, that's in suffering, you are so selfless, it's giving a golden ray around your picture, ;) aura pax borealis almost ;) instead of aurora borealis ;) xx

- Elisa



Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

ahh, you bring light big sis, thank you for that... always! I can't thank you enough... you words he.. read more

10 Years Ago

You know, bro, I"m just happy and proud of you, that you're always writing, bringing art, living lif.. read more



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The trials of life can be daunting and feel as if the weight of never ending space is hanging on them dripping with stars and suns ready to explode. What is heavier the body or the heart? I would have to say the heart always weights heavier. The emotions weigh us down much more than actual weight.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

10 Years Ago

We if wait long enough the trials do move on and don't seem so strong later down the road. Raw emot.. read more
Pax

10 Years Ago

you are so right, but then there are some trails that needs more time to built up the courage to fac.. read more
Poetic Beauty

10 Years Ago

You are quite welcome
Such a piece of art... the photo, drawn to gravity, as the body and the words, both make a heaviness of the realm. (but beautiful) there is pain in your words, that always bring the best art above. So admire that. "waiting to be brave?" he? I don't get that line, you "ARE" already, by posting it bro. Many can't are struck in their neurotic silent realms, you are just opening here, opening up. That's courage! uh, nothing but courage!!!!

"Obedient as I am, the ocean is my starting point, down below
to where I creep and swim in slow-mo."

What a beautiful line full of deep thought, as deep an ocean can be, and as we tend to be both water signs, it's you that keeps the head up in this... slo-mo, speaks for "being aware" of that moment, of below ness. You are aware you are swiming slow-mo, so you control your dreamy mind, in thought, to realisation. I know deeply the metaphor is related to your beautiful country and all that is happening there, my heart is with you and yours.

Know I'm on the other side of the world, but my heart is Asian, and living and loving each happening.
Please "let the feeling get "OLD" so you can be there in your beyond ages, and future still for your folk"
You're an artist people need to read, need to live by. You did the best you could with this astonishing write, to reach out, not only for yourself, but for any human being, that's in suffering, you are so selfless, it's giving a golden ray around your picture, ;) aura pax borealis almost ;) instead of aurora borealis ;) xx

- Elisa



Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

ahh, you bring light big sis, thank you for that... always! I can't thank you enough... you words he.. read more

10 Years Ago

You know, bro, I"m just happy and proud of you, that you're always writing, bringing art, living lif.. read more
I believe heart control the body and the mind. A broken heart can leave us wanting and needed nothing. A broken body can heal with time. The poem is very good. I like poetry that open the door to question and possibilities. This poem did. Life is fair. Do the right things and you will be okay. Live for the wrong things. You can be left alone to swim in your mistakes. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

I do admire, always those shared wisdom my friend... thank you for that.

Life is fair.. read more
I just start to realize the therapeutic value of poetry . Here we can express our pain and deep sorrow without being so discreet ..Since we use metaphor our intentions and motives are conspicuously hidden to many or innocent bystander . Yet its plain simple and wide open for those who truly knows the heartfelt sound and language of a bleeding heart . Poetry allows us to express the inexpressible . It makes us unique . Almost beyond normal unless we allow it to get over our head. and think we're better than others then by our own ego and pride we have reduced ourselves to merely " Hand Shakers " .
Poet has that special gift to write express and perceived other peoples pain though concealed un words . Like some poet most people in the church are good in extending handshakes but not not in seeing the heartaches . Have we listen to the melody of a puff up heart ?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

Neil, my friend, a big thank you. I really do appreciate and really admire those friends of mine tha.. read more
A very tender, and very beautiful. Nicely done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

thank you, my friend.
I was in Louisiana for both hurricane Katrina and Rita....I slept lil in days between the two and had violent nightmares of the sounds inside. I felt much fear in my heart...even when weather and nature had never bothered me before. I watched as we evacuated and felt the terror in souls. For months after our return I could smell death and decay as the winds blew certain ways. Our family lived in a camper for a year while we rebuilt. Like zombies our bodies preformed tasks even when exhausted for our minds couldn't watch those who suffered more than those of us that left.I feel so much that I would like to forget in your words but you remind me how real and fierce both life and death can be...how pressing the need to feel them is. I send out all my prayers and hopes for your people! You are so strong.....I know you will endure. I wrap you in my love today and hug upon you healing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

thank you so much dear friend, know that you've been missed here. I remember when I was young, there.. read more
The weights on the heart are heavier than the body not doubt about it. I feel torn and saddened for the events in your country for I prayed for speedy recovery. Life is short and fragile and the end is very near but we will be in eternity one day and time. I like the way you say at the end : life unfolds for life unfolds with so may surprises that we expect and not...An excellent write...:)..............

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the heart outweighs the body by an ocean's breath..and that is a very long, wide and heavy breath.

i am glad you are okay, Pax...and my prayers are with those unfortunate people in your country who have suffered because of what is happening there.

jacob

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this poem.

Your first stanza had such strong emotion in it. There was a deep pain and yet a desire to be strong, to endure and overcome the pressures and obstacles of life. In the second stanza you speak of the road, the journey, towards something, a nebulous uncertain destination. With that, there is sorrow, and the image of the road's dead glow was very bleak, giving the sense the world around you is faded and grey, almost lifeless. Still, you endure it, bowing to the will of the waves, going with the flow. Still, you end with the sense of being stuck, unable to move forward as freely as you'd like.

The final stanza got a bit confusing for me, I think due to your word choice. However, I think I sussed out the meaning. This stanza is about hope and despair. You speak of cold feet and the feeling of needing something vanishing. You no longer wish to continue this way, though your will is slipping, that endurance you held so strongly to in the past stanzas has faded. You still wish be brave and strong though, you just aren't sure if you can do it anymore, as this feels like what your life now is...as if it will remain that way.

This is an extremely powerful piece my friend. Sure it could use some clean up, and if you wish I can message you some suggestions, but still the message is loud and clear. I have to say, don't give up. Ride the waves because you can make it. The bleakness of the road's dead glow won't remain forever.

I hope things change for the better soon, Pax. As much as I like this, I do wish you had cause for much happier pieces.

-Caradoc

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

10 Years Ago

I'm always speechless on how you see my poems my friend. Exact and vast understanding. I admire that.. read more
Caradoc

10 Years Ago

Ah, I see. You're most welcome my friend, always.

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