heavy heart #1

* part 1

 

 

 

 

Which is heavier, my body or this heart of mine?

 

The quantity of the heart is much harder to reassure.

Life is full of assumptions and depressing pressures.

Undecided but I’m riding the ocean waves.

Instinct is my driven force, wanting to be brave.

 

I walk in a road where the path has a dead glow.

I kiss the shadow of nothing, to endure - I bow.

Obedient as I am, the ocean is my starting point, down below

       to where I creep and swim in slow-mo.

 

My feet had grown cold doing what he has been told.

The needy feeling had gone old.

 

I open my heart to go bold.

Just another piece of my life unfolds.

Author's Note

Photo credits:

Week 27 - I Was A Heavy Heart To Carry
by
anuelestheim

This is the first of the series of poems I made this week.

a series of the heart & Mind:
1. ) Heavy Hear #1
2. ) Vast Space #2
3. ) Silent Scream #3
4. ) ~ Land of Poets ~

Reviews

[Pax]

Such a piece of art... the photo, drawn to gravity, as the body and the words, both make a heaviness of the realm. (but beautiful) there is pain in your words, that always bring the best art above. So admire that. "waiting to be brave?" he? I don't get that line, you "ARE" already, by posting it bro. Many can't are struck in their neurotic silent realms, you are just opening here, opening up. That's courage! uh, nothing but courage!!!!

"Obedient as I am, the ocean is my starting point, down below
to where I creep and swim in slow-mo."

What a beautiful line full of deep thought, as deep an ocean can be, and as we tend to be both water signs, it's you that keeps the head up in this... slo-mo, speaks for "being aware" of that moment, of below ness. You are aware you are swiming slow-mo, so you control your dreamy mind, in thought, to realisation. I know deeply the metaphor is related to your beautiful country and all that is happening there, my heart is with you and yours.

Know I'm on the other side of the world, but my heart is Asian, and living and loving each happening.
Please "let the feeling get "OLD" so you can be there in your beyond ages, and future still for your folk"
You're an artist people need to read, need to live by. You did the best you could with this astonishing write, to reach out, not only for yourself, but for any human being, that's in suffering, you are so selfless, it's giving a golden ray around your picture, ;) aura pax borealis almost ;) instead of aurora borealis ;) xx

- Elisa

[Pax]

ahh, you bring light big sis, thank you for that... always! I can't thank you enough... you words here dugs deep, truly touched... so glad you understand me so well... there are still many things I am not so brave off, I am still finding that courage to open the lock door, processing in slow-mo everything that had happened...

I have read this few many times now(this review and the poem and also every one's understanding), and processing really good to feel every word you say and others as well...

I am being courageous because I have a family here, specially i have a great big sis here...one of the wall flower of wc :)...

sigh... such wonders in words... many more hugs coming...

You know, bro, I"m just happy and proud of you, that you're always writing, bringing art, living life, the fullest..... I am just here to praise your beauty, as you deserve that. And I look up to you! :) always be the selfless heart, you are for others... shine, bright my brother star :) I'm smiling.

[Wórdsmíth]

Oh my friend ... now i`m confused, why you think to stop writing?? you`re just awesome at writing and yeah ... i`ve read all the series of your poems and I find this first one`s much more personal to you than the rest ones ... all series are nicely discovered with your humor and I adore this!! If anything I`d to say to you then i`d say that this write`s one of the favorites of mine. Beautiful imagery ;)

[Pax]

my wordsmith friend, it is indeed the most personal one, the very first line of this piece is the one that started all, the feeling of heaviness - to question how it weigh my whole being… is simply sometimes heavy, but I am slowly understand what it feels and accepting everything to embrace what’s really there behind the closed door…

you asked: why you think to stop writing?? Sometimes that’s the reason, the heaviness…. I can't thank you enough for all your understanding my Wordsmith friend...

[Wórdsmíth]

Your welcome, my friend ... Oh well, thanks for answering the question, you`re far kind. Well friend, no one can run away of their HEAVINESS because it comes with happiness putting us all down into the sadistic life ... if you want to win or overcome this HEAVINESS, what you have to do is .. "WRITE" because .. To a writer, his writing`s everything to overtake his hurdles and heaviness`s as well ... because writing`s a great way to escape from the problems and along the side, it makes the door open to find a life of happiness. Keep writing, friend without worrying of anything .. because what you doing is already you making your future ;) You`re already on the right tracks, don`t get divert .. tracks are made to be broken and let you fall down into the well but you`ve to walk over the right ones to build your own ones ;)

[Pax]

*big smiles, the track will be long and hard, that I know off, with your words its felt like it will be easy in time, well see.... sigh... you are so full of light my friend, thank you :)

[Belle]

I think I have said this before but I'd like to say it once again; world will forever indifferent to us, but we always have a choice : be passive to social realities or make an act and define own meaning to help create a better world. The choice is yours, but of course responsibilities is heavy as the mountain, how strong you are to carry them? That is the challenge.

[Kasey Miriam]

beautifully writen and yet so somber

[Tai Ryens]

Such an enticing concept, whether your heart has to suffer the weight of the body it resides in or your body must heave around a heart weighed down by woes and wonders and the pressures of everyday life beating down on it. The way in which you describe the ascendance from the lowest points of the Earth to just the surface adds very rich complexity to the piece, and speaking of the exhaustion that the feet must bear while they look forwards to the path still able to be trod on.
Well done, this was most certainly full of such stunning emotions.

The icon makes the poem seem so much more enthralling, just an afterthought.

[Brendan McCallum]

Art? hopefully as art has no purpose other than itself, I say this in a nice way as you are an artist although I find it difficult to find a place in poetry for such a thing... forgive me if I said too much as I am new here and am looking to find my way, ;-) Brendan

[Nusquam Esse]

This is powerful, as if the whole world is trying to suck you down, crush you, destroy you! Just remember, the heart, unlike the body, can always heal, as impossible as it may seem at times. Only issue I am seeing here is " I bow, for one the quotation mark is out of place, perhaps you originally entered --, and the site just screwed it up? As for bow, it doesn't really rhyme with the other words, so perhaps you could rework it for a better rhyme? Anyway, good work here, as always.

[BlackRose]

So sad this one is. Hearts do take the heavy load of what's been dumped on them so to speak. Sorry for what ever's going on in your country. You might relate to song lyrics that I put up not long ago called, Nonsense Noise. Let me know what you think. We are all here for you.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I really love the way you rhyme, and how every thing you write is deep, and has such strong meaning to it, filled with much emotion :)
Great write :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

A beautiful piece for sure.

[Pax]

thank you so much my friend...