I hear two sides to this amazing write dear Pax. There is the environmentalist in me that hears a gripping tale of how we( mankind) are ravaging our water supply ..making it dirty and undrinkable. How we waste so much of nature's gift for selfish reason. The second thing I see here dear Pax is YOU. When I read this ..I see you..standing at the edge of the shadows ...longing to walk into the light and be showered by the rains of happiness and love..of life and droplets of salvation...but you hesitate even when you know that you are dying...thirsty ...pressed for more than this trivial existence is giving...know that you are not wasting away like the oceans..you are the line where water meets land ...its seems unsteady but you are the balance that keeps it all in check you have both the thirst of the land and the dryness of the ocean. YOU ARE THE EDGE OF SERENITY> SPLENDID WRITE!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
wow, wow, wow...
I can't believed how much you see me in this piece, I keep reading your word.. read morewow, wow, wow...
I can't believed how much you see me in this piece, I keep reading your words, can't help but admire on how you reflect on what you see in this piece... you see everything what i believed in - equilibrium - i am just in the shadows, lurking, waiting for that rain of happiness and love... hoping..
I can't thank you enough... big smiles and hugs...
11 Years Ago
My eyes see what they must..my lips must say as they are led to by truths...I am just their simple h.. read moreMy eyes see what they must..my lips must say as they are led to by truths...I am just their simple host. Your beautiful soul shines in this piece& your reply to my senses. I am in awe of it's aura!
I endless times have read in my course books or any other book that we should not pollute water.
But the human selfishness is preventing from it's implementation.
Human since long time are contaminating water.
They yet, don't know the worth of this god given gift. Not only water another natural resources are exploited.They don't know that existence of this resources is directly related to human's need and also for their development.
Your poem has an impact.
You have written this poem on the behalf of soul of water. Your words let me meet the motive of your's.
I might say that the existence of resources is a boon to earth but a curse in the absence of it.
Our world is blessed by, god, by the resources so that we can satisfy our needs. We only can save this resources when we in our mind keep the consequences of wasting it.
An intriguing write.
Your poem directly reflects the stupidity of human beings.
Living in a fish bowl, hey there's Queenie down there! She'd say it better than I so I'll nod and smile my friend :) We are contaminating our very planet and therefor ourselves, this was wonderful stomp of your foot my friend!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
how true, they said cleanliness and care starts with oneself... thank you so much my friends, always.. read morehow true, they said cleanliness and care starts with oneself... thank you so much my friends, always!
Such a powerful angle to take on this matter, your combine, advocacy, with genuine plights of agony, your descriptive talents are personalised with persuasive knowledge and experience, a fascinating piece of work here, very well done, fantastic!
Oh, really amazing piece and tribute to ocean! Yes, so many million people do not care of pollution of the waters and nature, of the ocean and any part of green area..But also so many now care, as you who write this poem! The problem become bigger and the consequences too..If nature not become priority in this world...we (people) will fall in our own trap! You give the words of the ocean in so brilliant way, the clear monologue from the heart of the waters... Magnificent! {really so good photo!!}
Greata write Pax. I appreciate the fact that you take a stand for dear Mother Nature. You are so right.
We must keep our Green Earth green. Writes like yours can go a long way to accomplish this my friend.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I am grateful with your words my friend...
That's my long time wish, to make the earth .. read moreI am grateful with your words my friend...
That's my long time wish, to make the earth more green like before cause unlike now its getting less, & less greener... its a sad case for mother nature, we should realized that our natural resources is not forever there... thank you very much my friend...
I love personification here, bro. My former favorite literary device. Nice wordplay. You made the ocean express her thoughts and feelings about what is happening...of how people treated her.
Bravo!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you pretty friend, yes, many have mistreated the ocean, and we as human tend to forget that..... read moreThank you pretty friend, yes, many have mistreated the ocean, and we as human tend to forget that... grateful here to you my friend...
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I am Willyam Pax from the Philippines and now residing here in Saudi Arabia for work. I am not a writer but a sensitive aspiring artist who expresses himself into .. more..