the false prince

- a dreamy piece........

The false prince

 

I am no prince

Nor I am of royal blood

 

There is just nothing more of a dream

I wince of meaning to be someone

That person was never me

 

The crown I once wore,

I thought was forever meant

Temporary was I all to be

Shame on me

 

I kept running from the storm

Hoping to evade what fear had brought

Now facing what I fear the most

A reality slap

     to wake up on this lovely nap

 

Once I was a false prince

     in a dreamy fantasy pretense

 

Now I thought I was a walking dead

All along I was asleep on my bed…

Author's Note

credits to the photo used by the talented photographer :shapovalo

hope you like what i hide, thanks for reading....

Reviews

[Shep]

I used to think there was a little prince in all off us guys. until i looked in the mirror and saw me. No that mirror is broken as i shattered it with my fist. wanting to take the pieces and tear the very flash off my face, and stub the monster i see. Too this day i no longer look in the mirror knowing the prince that used too me is no longer there. So i no know this poem. i know the feelings behind it. I know the dream well, because its my true reality.

[Baby Ricochet]

Beautiful poem mr pax. Outstanding

[Pax]

thanks my friend
your outstanding person yourself...
grateful with this visit and review...

[asdarkeyesclose]

'Once I was a false prince
in a dreamy fantasy pretense'


the prince need to find a princess and then his world will be magical again. reality can be too much if we get to fragile, to survive you need to be strong. I see sleep as a wonderful escape from reality, the healer where I can be a princess and it doesn't matter but waking up can be tough. fantastic.

[Pax]

indeed, my sleep is often my healer...
thank you very much my friend...

[MOON]

Poignant lovely write we all perhaps prince and princess of our own castle and sometimes our castle is built on clay and we loose the dream and become ordinary again!

[Pax]

very true Moon my friend... I always appreciate you coming by and give your beautiful words... thank you.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I feel here very impactful oppositions of reality- dream- life - death. It`s so nicely expressing your own emotions and conditions; The prince/ princess could live in everyone of us..even in your eyes it has little more dark view - with the last verse:
Now I thought I was a walking dead
All along I was asleep on my bed…

Even so, a false prince is still one "prince" no matter in which reality it exists...so we could just view it in this way :) Reality is always too sharp for the warm sensitive hearts...

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[Pax]

Reality is always too sharp for the warm sensitive hearts... wow... i agree... thank you so much dear friend... your insightful as ever...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

There is irony is this piece:

I am no prince
Nor I am of royal blood

from the beginning...

Now I thought I was a walking dead
All along I was asleep on my bed…

The passage leads one to think how the mind goes within a dream...from one lapse to another...I do like the usage of the rhyme... also in this work...

[Pax]

oh yes the irony... sometimes i often didn't see that, and i am so glad you found this...
thank you again for your helpful review my friend...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I'm bouncing around here like a pinball wizard...at the Cafe...there is the good, the bad and the ugly...in the verses I've read so far...I'm reviewing them all...no one will be left out...there's interest in them all...I'm open-minded...I hope writers/reviewers will come back and join us again...I've two writers coming back...so far...

[Pax]

yes indeed... like life in the outside world, it has many faces...

wow, that's great my friend...

[gabrielle]

Sometimes we turn to the fantasy land to momentarily shield ourselves but no matter what we do reality will always pull us back to face on the challenges. The first step to achieve our dream is to wake up and act on it.... oh, i'd rather be a knight than a prince =)

[Pax]

perhaps i know you'll choose to be a knight than a princess for i know your a headstrong person with wits and intellegence... athena is that you ;)

the false prince is the big metaphor in this piece... but i am always glad to know what lies beyond its extent... thank you very much gab my beautiful and witful friend :)

[gabrielle]

Athena? Whoa.. lightning might strike me.

I am neither Athena nor any deity
I am just a plain “promdi”—
A daughter of the valley and the sea,
Covered with flaws and human frailties
But I assert strength, relentlessly
For in persistent invocation, I believe--
I shall possess and obtain thee. lol.

welcome pax!

[Pax]

wow, a poem...hehe..
I liked it... you should post that, its worth posting in your pages...perhaps you do have the characteristics of athena... :)

[Corset]

I felt this so strongly, Paxie, princes are for fairy tales, they aren't real unless you're Princess Diana, who found out that princes aren't always on white horses, they are mainly just a body like yours or mine that people like to pin titles on because it makes us feel more organized to have a leader. I love how you brought this feeling out in this , the pressures of being one with a title is a whole world ninety-nine percent of the population would not know about or care to have.

[Pax]

thank you so much dear friend... your words are a gift itself :)
i am grateful with your insight..

[one sky]

Sometimes we see ourselves in a fairytale...that's what imagination can do to us. LOL.

I like the image. So apt for the piece.
Just saw a couple of little slips:

*Temporary was I all to be
Shame on me----------------------was all to be shame on me

*Hoping to evade what fear might brought----------what might bring (might is for future tense of verb; brought is past tense already)

I general, I like the concept of living in fantasy and daydream. Like what your shout out said last night.."Wake up!"

[Pax]

i am awake now, yet occasionally I dreamed that lovely dream – though just temporarily…thanks for the help and review my friend

[Poetic Beauty]

Dreams can seem so real sometimes. They dances with emotions, color and all the sensations or at least for me they do. Sometimes we would like to think we are a prince or a princess but in reality it is only within our own minds. Nothing more than over glorified thinking.

[Pax]

thank you Miss... "Nothing more than over glorified thinking", yes very true...

[Poetic Beauty]

I truly enjoyed this ride into the subconscious mind.