melancholia musing

a bit abstract poem

 

 

 

Reviews

[Belle]

This reminded me of the star that guided the three wise men to Bethlehem. And we take lantern as the symbol of that star that we hang in our window which gives us hope/light.
Funny you may take my thought about it, but just want to say that even the wisest man needs light on his way...

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very original piece, and I like the graph and the star metaphor in it! The first verses have amazing rhymes and somehow like an echo in mind...Then it become like music of repeating drums..Marching in dark shadows gives me impression of a soldier - or fighter with the life...Shadows are everywhere around us, if we want to see them! but most important is to concentrate on the glowing star..as you so nicely said " I`m worthy to stand the highs and laws" very true, dear Pax! :) as u show here, melancholia could be so creative!

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25.08.013

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Hi Kuya, it's been a while since I've read your poems :)

I like the flow of your poem and wow it gives a really different feel than from what I've read of yours. It only goes to show how much you've changed :)

Lovely write

[MOON]

Lovely flow great lines and dep thoughts Pax.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You seem to take a detached approach to addressing the dreary, heart clogging dysfunction of melancholy, I did enjoy your word play, very well done!

A very wise, and playful poem of clever words my bro... you always think and think things through so well...

I find it interesting, this is sorth of a letter to yourself, or a dialogue you have with yourself.
The words are indeed a bit abstract, and how I could see you drawing... with the perfect color shades next to eachother, to merge. Stap by stap, slowly, but powerful. A fantastic piece Paxie.

- Elisa

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Dear Paxy,

I am truly amazed! You have grown so much here at WC... I never had a doubt that you would be one of the greatest... such riveting words here!!! You have set your ink on fire, my friend, never look back!...awesome write!~xoxo~:)

[Pax]

wow, my beautiful friend... coming from you i am truly honored. You know i don't see myself as great so i am thankful that you think i am one, having melancholy as muse creates many beautiful works but in the other end its a burden as well... i truly appreciate you and everyone here - coming around and read my verses... that means so much...

[Kenneth The Poet]

A bit abstract yet I get this. You are trying to rise above the melancholy. Nice rhythm, nice internal rhyme.

[Dhaye]

"I protect thee, to fend off the crows
For I am worthy to stand the highs and lows"

I can feel the strength of the voice here. In this complicated life, still the will to survive is important. Though hardships were encountered and sadness is inevitable, the person has still the choice - to move on or to stop.

I like this piece of yours, Pax. Sorry if I haven't read this right away. I keep on chatting with you because I'm a talkative person. Lol.

Great!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Pax - the twist and turns of this... as a reader goes about with the tongue twister of a read...