Questionable Mentality

~ i am not crazy, just thinking crazy :D

 

To think or just blink - something click, then link

a pink fluid runs in the sink, it stink of raw ink

I did a sharp clink

And I laugh like a lunatic

The stinging click makes my brain tic

Then someone wink, I panic

Horror runs in terror deep in my fatty exterior

my heart roars its pounding beat as I roam in fast feat

I struggle for self-control calling all my self-patrol

Holding my reality intact in which for now, I lack

Insanity pulls my multiple personality

~ Questionable mentality ~

Shake, shake rapidly

 now I dance stupidly

all attention now is in me, then I ran horridly

someone pinned me, I scream endlessly

something pierce my skin

a sharp quick pain

a fluid sips through my veins

rushing calming every stiff muscles, then once more I leap

then my heart stops its bouncing beat

my craziness slips into a silent sleep!

 

Author's Note

It started as a wordplay for something horrifying that ends up into something crazy ~ I think i needed my psychologist now...lol(kidding)

~ enjoy my friends!

Reviews

[asdarkeyesclose]

i love the way you experiment with words and ideas, this wordplay is a perfect example, you always stretch the horizon slightly and explore the world, take us to new concepts and ideas. this poem is no exception and is another example of why i rate you as one of the most exciting writers here at the cafe, the word play here was brilliant. it is good to see a writer developing and i always get the feeling you are getting slightly better every time you write- a lot of writers never progress in this way and it is wonderful to watch :) fantastic.

[Pax]

wow ~ i am speechless my friend ~ how can i ever thank you for this awesome response ~ i will treasure this very much! ~ people in wc inspires me much ~ like you with your ever beautiful verses ~ a big thank you ~

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i find good alliteration also...and it is bouncy...reminds me of a bad trip that ends up in death...the overdose...the insane high right before the collapse.

jacob

[Pax]

a good word plays practice my brain ~ smiling ~ thanks my friend ~ intriguing review, i like it ~ i really appreciate this :)

[Ency Bearis]

Impressive write with nice alliteration of those words. Good piece.

[Pax]

oh, i just read that in wiki just now and i find it fascinating to learned its name ~ in the process of making this poem i was thinking of a tongue twister and the good example of mr. Poe's the raven(for a horror genre) ~ thanks kabayan ~ now i learned something :) i am grateful again to you...

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. I love this whimsical but true sense of our lives and thoughts.
"then my heart stop(s) its bouncing beat
my craziness slip(s) into a silent sleep!"
That is a unique write and different from all you other ones. As always excellent job...:)

[Pax]

whimsical ~ i like that very much ~ it's good to have something fun for a time ~ i was aiming for a horror piece that ends up into a craziness..hehe... everyone's review makes me smile... now my co-worker said why am i smiling here alone...lol ~ i feel crazy now..lol... thanks my friend...

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. See that. We write things and we never know how people will take it . This was good. You can get the message across by using fun or even craziness...:)

[Pax]

thanks again my friend ~ your enjoyment is enough for me to keep on penning :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Pax]

oh i didn't notice the correction thanks my friend...

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Frieda P]

Ha you eating those funny brownies again Pax? If you're dancing stupidly it can't be all bad! Put a smile on my face this morning, sheer fun with my coffee, thanks for sharing you crazy lunatic! ;-)

[Pax]

hahaha ~ crazy is fun ~ lol ~ a morning smile in your face is priceless ;) ~ you know me too well i can't resist chocolate ~ ;) thanks my friend

[Pax]

and i just said to myself just a little bite then i end up having more...lol...

[Frieda P]

Ha yes the lunatic is in my head too, smiling like a crazy person here ;-) Always a pleasure and a treasure my friend.

[Pax]

~hugs~

[Sami Khalil]

How about kisses too...:)

[Pax]

a lot of smooches will do ;)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...

[Shadey Jadey]

(chuckels) This one made me smile Sir, you've outdone yourself. It flows brilliantly, and the ending was perfect. Great job Pax :D Xx

[Pax]

thanks my friend ~ I'm truly elated on how you enjoyed this write :D - jumping in glee, crazily! lol ~ i am grateful you like this....

[Shadey Jadey]

Hehe keep jumping Pax :D
The world is more fun when we can jump crazily rather then boringly :) Xx

[Pax]

agreed! :D someone say its an insane world we lived in...

[Shadey Jadey]

Hehehehehehe That is most true, very true :D