Poetry is therapy

now you see me, and i don't ~

 

                 I tried to be optimistic,

But all I got is being pessimistic

           - Negativity has took my Positivity +

My sensitivity often times becomes my futility

Sometimes I thought my life is a senseless joke

                        and my personal bank is broke

                          You see my inner voice is stranded

in a land of unfulfilled dreams, mostly wounded.

 

 ~ Poetry is therapy ~

Well for me, it’s just the tapestry of the weary

               - A deeper understanding,

Knowing my subjective everything.

 

I lost count of the number of times I was bitten

Smitten by money bin

Then realizing cash is not a way to win

Life is being content of what you have, that’s all it takes

for you to build a solid case

and everything comes in place.

 

 Believing out of nothing

  is becoming exhausting

Still I kept my faith in-tact

Hoping for a fact

That the pages I see is not a whack

Of crack-up

 mess-up

life of mine.

 

Author's Note

I know my words are a bit cliché(still trying to improve my vocabulary)… but want to prove that money isn’t everything. I guess my life is not as mess-up as I think it is…

My friends(in the outside world) tell me that why am I staying silent and letting everything comes to place as if I am being lazy. You know because I stand in to the choice I had taken… and living the consequences, I suffer. I just strike when the opportunity comes, because I have all the patience in the world, sometimes I stretch it too much, well but that’s ok … it’s bearable. Even though I choose badly, I still find that there is good in bad choices and learn from it…

a special thanks to ms. Belle for helping me undestant the elements of poetry.

Reviews

[Peter H]

no amount of vocab can compare to the thoughts of a simple and great work , vocab only mask's these to much more developed minds but when a poem can relate to anyone and everyone then its called poetry in my mind , if it strikes a feeling reciprocal to the feeling you tried to portray then it was worthwhile everyhting is cliche their is absolutely nothing we haven't done that was for the authors note .

but for the poem itself i found it tasty , a rather interesting one . but i've reviewed many poems on this site thus far and i can truly say from what i've read your feelings about a pessimistic life is mutual . it seems to be the driving catayst towards poetry so i really do take this title as an aphorism to life "poetry is therapy" and we who read other's work are the therapist of life :) thank you for sharing this

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

Very intense self-assessment, but relevant and truly human in all its falling, rising, and recovery. The title is a good statement because indeed it is a "saving grace" a way of giving therapy to a hurting soul - yet it is also a way out, a ladder, towards reaching higher and more noble goals. The poem is a look into ourselves but also a "look up" to where poetry can take us, if we allow it. Great healing and writing!

[Pax]

do you really believed in that ate Cyn, guessing i can't really say it healed me, but i can say it guided me... ayoko kasing masyadong asuming, kasi may nag sabi sa akin it's not all the time that yung poetry kuno nakakapaghilum... i guess it really depends on how we put it right...
Maraming salamat ate cyn... i appreciate this...

[Sami Khalil]

"Poetry is therapy ~

Well for me, it’s just the tapestry of the weary

- A deeper understanding,

Knowing my subjective everything."
I love your definition Mr. Pax and how you are maturing by leaps and bounds in your personal or poetic journeys. I can't or we can't define things for you but we can be by your side and support you in your choices . Every second goes by in life we are making choices, some are good and others are bad. The key to all is not repeating mistakes but turning every failure into a new opportunities and counting the things we did right .
Another one of your great writes...:)

[Pax]

Mr. Sami my friend, it's a it's always a pleasure to hear your insight as well ~ true ! It's always amazing to feel your support... I am so glad you found my growth ~ i am exploring many things now, failure doesn't meant it's the end... it's always the beginning... grateful with you around... thank you very much!

[Sami Khalil]

I totally agree. You are welcome...:)

[Marie]

Reaching for opportunity is less important than knowing when opportunity is there to reach.

[Pax]

hi Marie, it's always a pleasure to hear you insights... that is so true, and i believed you are right ~ but in my matter(maybe I am not so clear in my author’s note), i stand in the bad choice i made, because I knew there is still good on it… but what I’m trying to say is: I don’t go complaining why is this like this and like that easily… I wait for an opportunity… and sometimes I ponder it more in my writes… and reading it helps me understand it more better…

I say this because I don’t complain much in the outside world(perhaps only in my writes)… I feel that some people on the higher position has inferior knowledge than me(inferiority complex)… I only wait for the opportunity to speak up in the right time and place… I hate complaining, seems to me it’s an endless discussion, and perhaps I always knew I’ll be in the lose end…

Thank you so much my friend, for always sharing me your insight… I am always grateful with that…

[Pax]

Yes, "A deeper understanding, knowing my subjective everything: that is poetry "
born out of true feelings, picking out exactly what you trying to say, and bring it in eloquent ways. I enjoyed reading your brain travel here brother, I understand and see the depts of your soul, and the way you think... the struggles you feel, and with the positivism, you alway fly high.

Thanks again for this poignant write!

- Elisa

[Pax]

hey yah, big sis... tight hugs ... thank you for feeling the emotions i tightly hidden in the rhyming... I always try to be ok in everyone around me in the outside world...i guess i'm still trying to win the battle within me... i hope someday they will boil down to nothing freeing my thoughts.... grateful with you around big sis...

Thank you bro, I'm grateful with you around too! and I believe in you. I think that day may be there sooner than you yet believe xoxo tight hug!

[Pax]

i hope so, but i am not ready yet ~ the eye of the strong is still far but i sense its just around... ad hey i do like the pic, your really pretty big sis...

I hope the day comes soon, you deserve it hard working bro. It is not fair. And thank you, dear, just normal ;) just normal I am... x

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Wow... you are growing artistically, I can see the wheels turning and flourishing within your words... Each write has a unique expression. You have moved on to word play that has showcased your inner turmoil, which many can connect with. Nicely penned, my friend. (glad for Belle to help guide you, she is a sweetheart) ~xo~

[Pax]

~ hugs ~ thanks dear friend... yes, she is... she help me alot on understanding how really poetry goes for i have no background on it... I am grateful with you my friend...

[Pete Langley]

Experience moulds personal perspective, Pax. As you say in your notes, there is always good in bad choices - except in poetry! I love the thought stream, hate the poetry - it would probably sound great as a rap, but written, it grinds a bit for me. Sorry. P.

[Pax]

oh i love it when you disagree on something on my writings mr. Pete, would you mind expounding your thoughts on what you hate about it?

[Pete Langley]

The most obvious way of illustrating what I mean would be to rewrite it how I would produce poetry from it, but that defeats the object in a way. You haven`t decided what sort of poem you want to write. You`ve had an idea - a good idea - and started writing straight away, poeticising as you go (not very successfully).
What I would have done, I think, would be to get all my thoughts down, then sit back, decide on format...strict verse, loose verse, rhyme, no rhyme, order of thought, metaphor, simile, adjective , adverb, pretty much like a builder would build a house. Bricks, mortar, pointing, embellishment, finish. P.

[Pax]

hmm.... your response made me really think deep... and sorry I did take my time in understanding your perspective…

well i am not sure i understand you fully (sorry maybe it’s just me, language thing)... but what i think right now is that you think i didn't achieved what i wanted to conveyed.... right? ...

i always write introspectively, and in my poems I don’t usually have an idea at first of what I wanted to write… it’s either the idea comes to me or it doesn’t… either way the idea will just arose inside of me(on what I felt)… and the authors note explains what I think on the time I was writing it… Sometimes it’s always starts with a first line… then my emotion will guide through along as I started to write it. As you know I don’t have a vast vocabulary and my English language is quite rusty so practicing it in poetry is a good learning…

at first I thought you were disagreeing on my definition on what poetry is like ~ and I am not saying I am correct or wrong in that matter, it’s just what I believed in…so I could either be wrong or right for I didn’t invent poetry… :)

sounds like a song, right? I don’t specialized in rhyming, I like free verse, for it conveyed more of my feelings… but in this matter im exploring what I can do… and usually I am quite dull and lazy person… so I don’t have much info & their definition: metaphor, simile, adjective , adverb ~ maybe I just know them by instinct… like I said in my past poem: Remembering is not my strongest forte, My instinct have sharpened through the years of forgetfulness…

And about the: order of thought ~ maybe you have known me by just putting every thoughts in my paper without order… maybe I am, maybe I am not… the things is I usually jump from thoughts to thoughts – in my imagination(like I said to my friend: it’s a jungle in my mind)… but in terms of writing I go with the flow of my feelings… sometimes what I thought contradicts on what I write… so either way I don’t usually post without order…

Hope I explained myself without offending you, if so I am saying sorry now… and I thank you for your honesty mr. Pete… it’s a pleasure to meet such intellectual person…

[Pete Langley]

Firsr, Pax my new friend, I`m not offended in the slightest. Despite what you say, I think you know the language very well, and as for poetry...well, I wasn`t trying to give you a lesson in how to write.....if we all wrote the same way there would be no need for this site. What I was trying to do was explain the way most successful poems are written. It sounds mechanical, but it`s not. The only aim is beauty in the piece. In the same way that a sculptor sees in a piece of stone an image of what it will be when he finishes his work, first fashions the vague shape, then, as it becomes more defined, spends more - and more - time deciding the fine detail which will eventually produce the finest possible thing of beauty he can. Go to it, my friend. There is good work in you, I know. P.

[Pax]

~ smiling ~ I knew it! I was wrong in interpreting you… glad you explain further and I didn’t offend you(because sometimes you’ll never know if your words are harsh enough to hurt someone, I’m just being careful – I don’t like debate gone wrong).

I see what you mean now. First of all, I’m a very flawed person~ I have lots of mistakes, bad choice, messy & etc… ~ and in writing I am in the same way ~ no matter how many times I read and reviewed my work ~ I am still blind on its flaws(the mechanical stuff - grammar & etc..), that is why post & share my work, not to paint my ego but to learn from you(the readers of my work), to get something on what’s wrong with it – I see in your explanation, I lack something on it… (I think I achieved the messy feel on it- about how I present it) …but on how I sculpt it as a piece to be the finest, no I think I didn’t achieved anything… they are just plainly expression of my thoughts, nothing so special on it.

I am very glad with this conversation. I learned from it, that I think I needed more refinement on my poetry, I will strive for the better. Grateful with this conversation mr. Pete…. Thank you very much for sharing you view on the matter…

[Ency Bearis]

You got it kabayan the cure effect of poetry, no need of Rx. Well expressed inner feeling and written well.

[Pax]

Salamat kabayan... smiling ~ hopefully there is no need for that :)

[Frieda P]

Oh poetry is therapy for sure, you wove your own frustrations into this lovely poetry. We purge it all in our work, beauty & the beast. '

'Believing out of nothing
is becoming exhausting'

VERY exhausting, that's why we write my friend, pen on!

[Pax]

Ms. F my friend.... thank you very much, yes let's pen on and write, write and write...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This really true and it speaks the reality of our life in this world. This is an icebreaker to the life today that always a material drivin, sometimes it is good to make a full stop, breathe and write poetry. Thanks for sharing excellent write Sir Pax.

[Pax]

ok lang ba change ko yung title?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I think mas mabigat ang orginal :)

[Pax]

so meaning mas ok yung first one? often times sa title ako ma-stuck up. Salamat kabayan!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

K lang but the first title magnified the very thought of our passion.

[Pax]

oo nga eh., kaya i change it back. Salamat ng marami kabayan... I really appreciate it. I'll be reviewing soon...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) ok lang Pax alam ko busy ka heheheh Pen on!

[Pax]

and yup you get the message very well...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes anyway see yah :) have a good day.