Desperate Taking

~ an opening poem for the next chapter...

 

Encompassing

I ‘am falling into the arms of being alive

 

Can be lust, be love

 ?

 

Is desire heading to the road of love

?

 

Seems like I forgot

-

“How to love”

Mixing fire and desire

Is not a friendly match

Sacred Vows or Broken Homes

is not my thing

Seeing the lady of my thoughts

Give me a hammer to break rules

Ruining symbols of love

 

My affectionate emotion

Broke down into tiny piece

As I beg for your body

Then it all comes into a

desperate taking

pushing every boundary

every limit

and pulling-out every defense

until you submit to my savage need

and you follow your own indulging passion

to me

*

Author's Note

a poem partly based on Bone's thoughts in my Book Every little thing

this poem comes after the chapter Climatic Pleasure.. to be compiled later...
still on the process on making the next chapter... hoping i don't run out of muses...
the pictures really help... ;) so I'm stretching my patience not to rush anything... even this poem... made it yesterday publish today.. :D
enjoy :)

Reviews

[Androglossia]

I think love and lust coexist in a way. I've said this to a friend on here and I'm saying it again. For me, love is a mental state growing within our minds which resides in our body, looking after physiological functions of our body including all our instinctive and intuitive desires. Sex too is a natural and instinctive desire of our body. Any function in which the mind is involved, body can't remain indifferent to it. Thus for me, love and lust are mutually co-generative and co-existing. But then I could be wrong. This is a very intelligent write, kabayan. And yeah, the photo is awesome:)

[Pax]

smiling.... "intelligent" ~ why can't i still accept that word to my system... for I am always a slow learner... a slow poke... a certain teacher proves that to me... well i guess I'm too negative on myself because of that...so i never am an achiever just the fool in the corner... dearly Maryanne... thank you...

with you insight... i highly appreciate that... and i can maybe say... we are all animals... we do sex as part of our lives... sex is there always... sex is how we act on how we like or love someone.... lust is a craving... and can be a longing for something for far too long right... so i think i could say love and lust are somehow connected... like in my second question "is desire heading to the road of love?" so lust and desire can build a bridge to cross over to love... :)
grateful with your insight kabayan!

[Androglossia]

Right on! Oh you can't always blame yourself for going through such experience. It happened to make you a batter person. Wise and experienced.

[Ency Bearis]

A great compassionate introspection, the emotion was embossed with such passion. However I agree with dhaye with regards to the presentation of the grammar, she pointed out those to you, just a suggestion to no offense.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! A poem based on your book. this is nice.
However, only few, little problems I noticed in some lines:

Sacred Vows & Broken Homes
is not my thing- ---- ARE not my things
Broke down into tiny piece---- PIECES
pushing every boundaries----BOUNDARY
every limits---LIMIT
and pulling-out every defenses----DEFENSE (every is for a singular subject).

I hope this could help. :)

[Wondering Mind]

I've stopped asking such deep questions, my friend...I enjoyed the imagery in this one..Excellent poetic expression.

[steppenwolf]

I love this! Romantic, erotic, GREAT images. Well Done.

[gabrielle]

Of love and of lust? could a man tell the difference?
i woman could but a man could not. just my bias thoughts on your sizzling piece, kabayan.

[Pax]

lol.... a little bias i say... but I'll always say not everyone.... ;)
salamat kabayan... sizzling ba? i thought its just plain thoughts...

[Shep]

Very caught up in the romance of this poems. Filled with strong emotions.awesome work.

[Corset]

whew, Paxie this was hawt, The climbing passion in the words and urgency was poignant and tangible, wonderfully expressed.

[Michael G.]

Desire has many friends and co-conspirators. Passion, need,want,and lust, all can walk hand-in-hand with desire. Love may not have anything to do with it at all.
A carefully thought out poem, good friend. Lots of room for the reader to venture into and think about here.