a drop of life

I'm planning to take a part 2 on this or i should not, now i wonder...

 

 

~Love~

 

I never knew that feeling

A word without meaning

…A stranger to what I felt…

Thought it’s strange that I knew it so well

 

 

~Life~

 

I walk by with you as I talk about you

…Existence is a mere essence…

It’s the life underneath my roots

My whole being is defined of what I decide about you

 

 

~choices~

 

I kept on thinking of you

A mystery in every event I stumble upon

Nonetheless your part of me that i fully submit

Facing and standing still

In all the consequences and risk

I have brought upon

in the end

Despite all those obstacles

I know deep within me

There will come a time

I’ll be able to dance

…In rhythm of contentment…

 

 

~dream~

 

You’re in my fantasy

…You’re in my Jar of unfulfilled wishes…

I walk in your clouds of heavenly sky

Reality slaps me too many times

Yet no matter how painful reality is

I still go to your realm

And dream an endless dream

Of my unfulfilled wonderings

Wishing & hoping

 

 

~Alive~

 

Living is as much as fading

Purpose of what I suppose

Is just another make-up prose

Of my days

Principles are timeless

…Endless…

Old yet golden

Though some are forgotten

throughout the pages of history

faded

But then they're relived now

Through experiences

As life goes on and on

As you live by

In its circling Journey

 

 

~Freedom~

 

I can’t be with you

as I am chained

Much controlled

Much reserved

Much more refined

…As if I’m bound to be blocked…

Locked within a nut shell

I guess being free isn’t allowed

Without hard labor

 

 

Author's Note

a pondering fiction

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Seems to me that you found someone with whom you felt almost at home, let's say, then as things progressed, you began to wonder about the different aspects of your so far independent lifestyle... hence your thoughts come under the sub.titles. The thoughts you placed under each are rather like the negatives and positives one can use to help make an important decision. But the all telling areas are the 'Alive and Freedom .. they wrap up what's come before, gradually release you in that place you were before. Maybe you 'escape' knowing far more about yourself and armed for the next time! Considerable thought processes above.

[Pax]

dear Ms. Em's,
i truly appreciate your insight on how to read my words. Independent Lifestyle made me more mature in understanding life.... i so love the lines on alive and freedom for they say so much of what's life's outcome(i think). I just wish I'm much armed for what life throw's at us, otherwise I'm always prepared now. Writing really helps me understand the ways of life and the reviews made me understand it more better than myself. Thank you so much.
your friendly neighbor,
w.Pax :)

[emmajoy]

Now you've added that, will later read your post again. :) My pleasure and interest.

[emmajoy]

You have a very fine way of living in and looking into your world. Life should be a good and sweet one for you, Pax. Truly pray it is.

[Pax]

oh, i didn't notice you here :), I'm praying every-night that every tomorrow will be ok and fine just as today... thank you greatly ms. Em's...

[Shep]

Another excellent poem and it was just what i needed to cheer me up as i write a very hard chapter. One of the hardest things i had to go through. it was a choice that if i didn't do it i would have been killed. And if i wasn't killed for failing the the tests that proved that i was not tainted, or that i have done the things Shawn and Arthur had been doing as well as many of the boys that have passed through the Rothwell home. As well as what him and his friends were doing to each other and as well as children like their brothers and including them. I would be killed or if the person testing me didn't do it. the people that had hired her would torture her family and kill them right in front of her then do the very same thing to her. So if you get it moment you can come by and check it out. Then go back to where you left off Chapters 154 Babysitter part 2 --- chapter 157 which i am now writing.

[Sir Joe]

I salute you for having encapsulated the different facets of life into one single literary piece. If it's not because the title, the poem couldn't have gotten its unity. The title served well for its unifying power. You could have created six poems if you separated all the stanzas into individual poems. Besides, they have individual bearings.

Let me now come to the grammatical scrutiny, if I may term it as such. LOL
Look at the following lines:

*My whole being is define of what I decide about you
---> My whole being is DEFINED BY what I decide about you

*A mystery in every events I stumble upon
---> A mystery in every EVENT I stumble upon

*None the less your part of me that i fully submit
---> NONETHELESS your part of me that i fully submit

*Reality slap me too many times
---> Reality SLAPPED/SLAPS me too many times

*But then its relive now
Through experienced
---> But then THEY'RE RELIVED now
Through EXPERIENCES

*…As if I’m bound to be block…
Lock within a nut shell
---> …As if I’m bound to be BLOCKED…
LOCKED within a nut shell


Nice one, again, Sir Pax!

[Pax]

salamat sa correction kabayan... always!

yup the title was intended... medyo na hirapan at first kasi di alam kung anong title... :) becuase at first when i made the poem its like they're 6 different poems but all connected to life... so ayun... salamat ulit :)

[Sir Joe]

Nice one, hehehe You are so welcome. =)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Great penned. But the last part freedom, I think you should magnified the piece. I am facinated for the last part but partly lost thinking what next, why not? what holds you back, why there is always a barrier in getting the goals. Is the speaker wanted to stay in the realm of fear or brush away fears and explore anything under the sun. I think this part you should make a part 2. Overall, it is a brilliant work Kabayan.

[Pax]

..Salamat ng Marami Kabayan...
for the last part i just want it to be a mystery... that i want everyone can relate to its own personal battles within... that why our freedom comes short sometimes.... I'm so glad you've read my work, highly appreciated...

[Rhianne Ney]

But this is really something that is worth reading. I never regret reading any of what you're writing Mr. PAx. They were all great and open to your soul as if you're really in front of me now (:

[Pax]

wow... you have a great imagination dearly little sis... your words brings fuel to keep me from writing... ~ smiling

[Rhianne Ney]

~Keep writing po talaga para masaya ;D

[The dark story]

wow..it's too great for me to be expressed my appreciation for this beautiful and sweet poem...it seems like you have extracted the true and precise meaning if all these things which covers our life.the words are coming out from the depth of truth.Honerstly i should say Hats Off to You!!

[An owl on the moon]

What brilliant ponderings... poignant thoughts and feelings that each live on their own, and yet dance so well side by side. You always challenge me to live my life in a deeper place.

[Pax]

thanks my friend... I'm so glad you found it that way... we are in this together... the deeper the place the deeper we understand life... grateful with your words.

[John]

Some wise thoughts and great phrases in this series of poems.

[Pax]

thank you much mr. John...

[steppenwolf]

Hi Pax. I love the section called "dream." I feel that way about my husband and believe it or not we've been married for 36 years.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

these segments are so clever, a way of assessing each virtue, relating to your personal life, some lines a very powerful indeed, thanks

[BlackRose]

Another FAB one that I wish I written myself. Captures the words so wonderfully. :o)

[Pax]

hey, my friends its nice to see you again... and thanks always...

[BlackRose]

And it's nice to be back. :o) Your very welcome.