This was a treasure trove of wisdom and powerful insights on life and its duality where only in the balance we can seek perfection but not in our neutrality . We have to fight the good fight , suffer the consequences of our actions , live to the fullest even in the face storms and rains , confront the realities of the unjust world for we have to set the path and the mission to achieve the inner peace and joy .
Keep penning my friend and finding that equilibrium ...:)
The duality of nature... day and night, black and white, good and bad... those are the two sides of life.
But I can see here more about balance than duality. Duality is just a part of this...so I think I can make something which focuses on the duality of human nature. LOL.
Anyway, when it comes to balance/ equilibrium...I really like how you crafted this piece. Balance is a great concept, for in life we cannot achieve contentment if we don't have equilibrium in all things around us.
A brilliant piece here, my friend. Keep inspiring uninspired people like __. LOL. Thanks for the link.
I`m sorry to say this piece leaves me cold. The sentiments are laudable, but phrased as slogans. They make assumptions that man can control his own destiny. The problem is inherent in the asssumption - he is combative, confrontational and territorial. This fails as a thesis and as a poem. I`m sorry again P.
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11 Years Ago
no problem, i value your opinion...for it strike a question to my thoughts...
but how can you.. read moreno problem, i value your opinion...for it strike a question to my thoughts...
but how can you say this:They make assumptions that man can control his own destiny. why, does man really can't control his own destiny... do you think that destiny is shape by our own choices...
This is a philosophical question that`s been around since Plato and before - and he came to the same.. read moreThis is a philosophical question that`s been around since Plato and before - and he came to the same conclusion as most philosophers throughout history have endorsed - that man as a species is disruptive and incapable of the equilibrium he craves. Your piece ellicites collective action - altruistic but completely impossible to accomplish.
11 Years Ago
wow... actually to be honest, i haven't touch or understand plato's work or any other philosopher..... read morewow... actually to be honest, i haven't touch or understand plato's work or any other philosopher... though i know them through history but actually studying their works...no, i have no idea...
this piece only talks about in what i see around me in media(tv, internet & around me) and understand in my own way of thinking... just a stream of consciousness... it will never be a thesis, this is just a fantasy of thoughts mr. Pete... a creative way on showing how i think... and in your words i see reality in it.... yes I'am never sure humanity can achieved equilibrium(man is too imperfect perhaps)... still in some way or another do you think equilibrium exist around us(but then that's just what i believed/perceived)...
all in all mr. Pete i truly thank you for your opinion.. it made me really think...thanks again
11 Years Ago
There`s nothing to thank me for, mate! I`m as imperfect as the next man, and more than most.P.
First off..kudos to a brilliant pic to inspire both the writer and reader. The struggle between all that is good and bad in this world has become an endless battle. Does there need to be a balance...can there be too much light? How would we know...I don't think I've seen it.
this poem was awesome! I am favoriting this! The only critique I would have, and I'm not sure if you did this on purpose or not, but in between the stanzas there is always a * and in between one of the stanzas instead of a * there is an @. But seriously great write! :)
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11 Years Ago
those are symbols to represent my artistic expression: feel * is like stars(my friend said i must us.. read morethose are symbols to represent my artistic expression: feel * is like stars(my friend said i must used numbers to represent indexes, yet i find * works for my artistic expression well), also they represents a separation of each thoughts... and lastly the @ represents 'and' or something just a borderline between good and evil...Thank you very much my friend, always a pleasure to hear your thoughts about my poem... :)
Your objective, Pax, in writing this poem is priceless and is achieved.
Balance does not only apply to the largest and the most important aspect in nature, it also applies even to the smallest part in a wide variety of contexts .
Federations, union, the government needs a system in which all competing influences are balanced, in order to have everything properly in place. I think Pax, with equilibrium, everything will be in great harmony.
Wow, it kinda has a fantasy, magic like feel to it, which is good for the imagination. A great escape from reality into a world that swirls with wonders. Awesome job, Pax.
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11 Years Ago
my friend its nice to see you around... thank you so much..
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