Life of the Entire Galaxy

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Life of the Entire Galaxy

a puzzle that needs to be solve that brings more confusion to the mind

 a math problem that seeks answers that brings more questions in the end

a riddle with twist and turns that brings more pathways with infinite possibilities

 

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:Authors Critical Thinking Notes:

There are pieces that brings out a much bigger puzzle, it’s an infinite phase that brings the unpredictability of the galaxy’s Life cycle, a tiny bit of fraction can lead to another superior picture.

 

you can never see what it seems to be

Man is trying to answers the cycle of life of the entire galaxy

Guessing that it’s too much information for man to take in his brain

But with the help of technology, maybe they can

I’m not a scientist, I’m not philosopher yet

But wishing I am

Dreams are free

Thinking big made you lost the grasp of reality

Just don’t forget yourself

To step in your ground

Find your balance

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Author's Note

just authors note:
I guess before i really want to be a scientist to solve the mysteries of cancer cell for the fact that my mother died because of it. A philosopher it didn't comes to mind, still I’m not sure I can for the fact that I’m not intelligent to be one, I just want to reflect on things fascinating to me, maybe I'm just a thinker Like my friend said Mr. Sami...maybe his right sometimes i got lost of realities time when i think deep, swimming in the depths of information in my head, imagining the things i want, what will i do, a lot of what if this and that, or thinking the simple things in my simple minded ways…

actually the first special three lines above are for human nature but then again, sometime i said to myself that human nature can be predictable, and this is something much bigger than man itself...

I want to thank ms. corset and mr. sami for a contribution on this write...


please tell me what you think, I need feedback….it’s either I’m wrong or I’m right…you judge…

Reviews

[Caradoc]

I think that only together can mankind discover the answers to our most daunting questions. Only as one people will it be possible to overcome all obstacles. Until humanity manages to see beyond its petty prejudices, the truths we seek will always elude us. Our questions will frustrate us, the answers will only continue to spawn more questions, and the puzzle pieces will remain scattered, the picture fragmented.

It's why I place a high value on poetry and other written works. Every person, no matter how skilled and talented or even untalented and unskilled, holds a piece of the puzzle. They see a piece of the bigger picture, even if it's only a tiny section. Without them and what they perceive we will be lost. All poetry is art, and art is a reflection of the soul and a key to understanding the questions we all ask ourselves.

If you have not already heard the song, "The Humbling River" by the group Puscifer, I invite you to do so. It is a strong expression of my thoughts on the subject.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts my friend. You are already a philosopher.

Be well.

-Caradoc

[Pax]

~my friend i treasure your feedback like everyone else had given me... you see something that sometimes i don't see sometimes... i value your response...thank you so much...
i will listen to the song later...

[Corset]

It is always a pleasure to read your thoughts Pax, you are always reaching and endlessly giving thought food for the readers. I was thinking earlier today, when comparing the infinite to our minds, which I agree is just too immense for us to fully grasp the enormity of the expanse. If we were to try to imagine how large I think it would be as if our planet is the size of an atom in the body of the universal God, and our universe is only the size of a fingertip, or eyelash. It just boggles the mind. Dreams are free, I loved that, wonderful write you have here!

[Pax]

Yes,its hard to grasp the enormity of the expanse...I like that... very much.. mind boggling indeed... i hope you remember the last line...for you give me that ...thank you so much my friend...

[B-poet]

A self clarification creed in regards to what position you occupy within the entire galaxy. I like the message your conveying here. Finding balance in the realm of the unknown. That's a task that requires a lot of concentration unfortunately a lot of people aren't ready to commit too that sort of thing. Great write though. I enjoyed it. :)

[Pax]

A self clarification creed in regards to what position you occupy within the entire galaxy.
~ i like that... its somehow clarify my understanding in this poem.... its something that its just me...questioning myself...

thank you so much my friend...

[AleyshaRosa]

Mind boggling.
Perfect. Poems like this make me want to sit down and ponder, wonder, wish forever. Very well done, Pax. Also, the format you wrote it in was very intriguing, and the font helped move that theme along. I liked it a lot, keep up with thoughts like this... Your mind is a very interesting place.
Koodoos

[Pax]

:)
~ thank you... this mind is a bit weird at times...
"Mind boggling"
~I like that... very much...thanks again...

[Extant]

Personally, I'd agree, I'd say you're right. On the other hand, I, for some reason, see science on the opposite spectrun from philosophy. It really is all a choice we make . . . either this is outside of our mind and we use external tools to bring it into perspective, or it is completely within our heads and we use internal tools to project out and prove truth. I guess I'm pulling all of this from the last half of your poem, as the first half, to me, was I bit too rough.

[Pax]

this poem is just like a puzzle that brings out more questions... the other half is too abstract i guess... and i agree with you somehow but why do i think that philosophy and science has the same road just different pathways... i wonder...

thank you so much my friend...your feedback made me think too..

[Extant]

You're welcome.

[Marie]

Finding answers only leads to more questions, and that's the way it should be. Human beings were meant to search--that's why there is always another path in front of us. The universe in a grain of sand is as important as the galaxy.

[Pax]

yes Marie...i totally agree with you... answers only leads to more questions..that's the main point and its a part of our human nature...
The universe in a grain of sand is as important as the galaxy.
~i really like this...thanks you so much..

[kublakhan27]

I'm still trying to wrap my mind around this but I lost my Dad to cancer this year so I do think I understand your mindset. When you encounter this kind of loss, I think there is a natural tendency to dwell on questions that can't really be answered...and one must be careful not to dwell on such things too much, as they can really get to you. That's how I interpret this piece, so hopefully I'm not too far off the mark. A fine piece of writing in any event.

[Pax]

Yes, its our natural way to cope up of the scar the cancer leave on us... we dwell on it....ponder on how can we make a difference or how can we stop it... for now everything is put in my jar of dreams...
thanks kub, i appreciate your thoughts...

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome^^

[FJ Davis]

Dreams are certainly free, and human beings must maintain emotional balance--two of the many good points made in this piece, Pax.
Excellent effort!

[Pax]

yes its the main points of this piece... for me and for everyone...
thank you Mr. frank...

[RachelReaper]

human nature... is a mix of the good, the bad, the ugly, and the beautiful, in my opinion. That's the thing about us, we're variables, so we're all going to vary in how we think, act, and go through life. I think there are things about the galaxy we will never know, but we'll keep trying anyway because that's just how we are. That's why I like the last line, "Find your balance" because I took it to mean that there's a balance to human nature. I liked this, it was very thought provoking.

[Pax]

thank you so much my friend...
your very right.. we're just variables to the problems, pieces of the much bigger puzzle... yes, its part of our nature to find answers that triggered our thoughts... and yes the last line is my fav too... for its because people now a days tend to forget how we balance ourself in everything we do...

thanks again for your feedback...

[RachelReaper]

:)

[Mia]

Human nature predictable, I think never. Aren’t we all selfish and yet somehow there’s kindness. I think trying to figure it all out is natural...wanting answers...wanting reasons. I don’t think we can ever fully know though. No matter how much we find out and how much we learn...there’s always more to discover. I also think it's natural to want to solve something, so that it never hurts people the way it hurt you. I think that most people who have suffered at the hands of cancer want to make a difference. As for you not being intelligent enough, well that’s you listening to everyone who told you, you couldn’t and I will not entertain that. Absolute nonsense to question your intelligence and I know it. You are a thinker, you always put so much thought into what you post and people always share so much because your work encourages us to think.

[Pax]

:):):) + three smiles for your my friend..
~ at times human nature "can be" predictable my friend... do you ever think how the detectives found out the murderers out there or the Psychopath out there... or how Psychologist read you like a book...

I agree with you...no matter how much what we've learned there are still so much out there that we cannot fully grasp...

and i agree again... i think that when your life is been touch by cancer... its leaves a scar that made you so emotionally attach to it...

thank you so much Mia my friend... Your feedback really is a treasure like everyone who reviewed this poem...for i think and ponder ...and savor each response....

[Mia]

It's a pleasure, I enjoy thinking about you've written and deciding what I think :)

[Pax]

hoping I've explain myself well...at times sometimes that human nature can be predictable but most of the time...it isn't....thanks again Mia...i humbly respect your views my friend

[emmajoy]

There's nothing wrong, absolutely nothing, in wanting to find cures for dreaded diseases or needing to explore thought to the nth degree. What is a little tricky if not more, is taking too great a leap before exploring channels. You obviously have an adventuous and courageous mind, but maybe.. maybe.. find a gentle, slower path to move forward. Your mind's far from simple!

Hopefully other reviewers will come read this and suggestion the various routes you might contemplate! Best fortune.

[Pax]

Thank you so much Ms.Emma... Your words fills the mind and i dig the fortune of everyone's thoughts... i appreciate your wisdom...thanks again...