Life of the Entire Galaxy

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Life of the Entire Galaxy

a puzzle that needs to be solve that brings more confusion to the mind

 a math problem that seeks answers that brings more questions in the end

a riddle with twist and turns that brings more pathways with infinite possibilities

 

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:Authors Critical Thinking Notes:

There are pieces that brings out a much bigger puzzle, it’s an infinite phase that brings the unpredictability of the galaxy’s Life cycle, a tiny bit of fraction can lead to another superior picture.

 

you can never see what it seems to be

Man is trying to answers the cycle of life of the entire galaxy

Guessing that it’s too much information for man to take in his brain

But with the help of technology, maybe they can

I’m not a scientist, I’m not philosopher yet

But wishing I am

Dreams are free

Thinking big made you lost the grasp of reality

Just don’t forget yourself

To step in your ground

Find your balance

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Author's Note

just authors note:
I guess before i really want to be a scientist to solve the mysteries of cancer cell for the fact that my mother died because of it. A philosopher it didn't comes to mind, still I’m not sure I can for the fact that I’m not intelligent to be one, I just want to reflect on things fascinating to me, maybe I'm just a thinker Like my friend said Mr. Sami...maybe his right sometimes i got lost of realities time when i think deep, swimming in the depths of information in my head, imagining the things i want, what will i do, a lot of what if this and that, or thinking the simple things in my simple minded ways…

actually the first special three lines above are for human nature but then again, sometime i said to myself that human nature can be predictable, and this is something much bigger than man itself...

I want to thank ms. corset and mr. sami for a contribution on this write...


please tell me what you think, I need feedback….it’s either I’m wrong or I’m right…you judge…

Reviews

[Caradoc]

I think that only together can mankind discover the answers to our most daunting questions. Only as one people will it be possible to overcome all obstacles. Until humanity manages to see beyond its petty prejudices, the truths we seek will always elude us. Our questions will frustrate us, the answers will only continue to spawn more questions, and the puzzle pieces will remain scattered, the picture fragmented.

It's why I place a high value on poetry and other written works. Every person, no matter how skilled and talented or even untalented and unskilled, holds a piece of the puzzle. They see a piece of the bigger picture, even if it's only a tiny section. Without them and what they perceive we will be lost. All poetry is art, and art is a reflection of the soul and a key to understanding the questions we all ask ourselves.

If you have not already heard the song, "The Humbling River" by the group Puscifer, I invite you to do so. It is a strong expression of my thoughts on the subject.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts my friend. You are already a philosopher.

Be well.

-Caradoc

[Pax]

~my friend i treasure your feedback like everyone else had given me... you see something that sometimes i don't see sometimes... i value your response...thank you so much...
i will listen to the song later...

[Ency Bearis]

Impressive and interesting contemplation, great piece.

[Pax]

thanks kabayan... I'm so glad you liked it... grateful with your words...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow! seems Mr. Gerald will get interest in this topic :). I believe the honesty of this poem and it is true. Balance is important to maintain everything in order. Great write Kabayan.

[Pax]

thanks kabayan... its one of my not so old writes... and reading this again inspires me... specially the responses... their thoughts and yours are priceless to me...

ps who's mr. Gerald?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Thanks too Kabayan :) Mr. Gerald is a wise man http://www.writerscafe.org/meno and we have some discussion regarding the mystery of universe and the complex nature of man. You can check my poem the loop and his poem beautiful stories an exchange of thoughts.

[Pax]

now i understand what you two are talking about... thanks for the link yes... i have read one of his work... and what he meant on your thread in the reviews on your poem is answered here... "you can never see what it seems to be" ~ the first three sentenses explains what he means... his highly Intuitive kabayan... I'll review that poem in a while...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yea I agree, he is.

[Devanshu Rajput]

a piece attempting to answer unanswered questions.....read this piece by David Lewis Paget..... somewhat like of yours....

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Dawei/1149370/

[Devanshu Rajput]

there is a suggestion that write your first four lines more bigger.....

[Pax]

sorry, no i think there is a difference... he questions god.. and in here i don't questions god's words... or i didn't mention god... this is a dream... an understanding on what really lies a puzzle in the galaxy... its a quest within a question... sorry my friend...i don't want to offend you or something... his work is more of a story behind it and mine is more about the question behind it..

[Devanshu Rajput]

ya....i agree with you....i just recommended it because both pieces were related to mystery of galaxies..... sorry

[Pax]

no worries my friend... i thought i might offend you in disagreeing... yes... i see the connection, but our perspective is much different... still the logic as i reread it now is the same way(in terms of there is something more out there)... but in the matter on how we viewed it differs again... please don't feel that I am offended...I am grateful that you find the connection.... and i just thought his just his much different from me... his much superior i guess... I'm just the little speck here...

[Devanshu Rajput]

no i haven't felt offended......i agree with you....

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I simply loved this poem philsophy, expressed is many questions and statements!
If you ask yourself so many questions, u may not exactly get the answer right now, but for sure, u are on the way! which is most important...I love thining about universe and galaxy and your poem is great expression of our "weakness" according to space and God...we can`t connect this puzzle by our minds, even genious, we are just humans, we even can`t fly, can`t go more deep than our senses and feelings..But i wish one day we will! my favorite lines are the core (means we never know):

There are pieces that brings out a much bigger puzzle, it’s an infinite phase that brings the unpredictability of the galaxy’s Life cycle, a tiny bit of fraction can lead to another superior picture.

nour~

[Pax]

yes! definitely your right: means we never know
~ a complex creation human can't fully grasp...
I really like your views for you expressed it very well with your heart..
I'm so honored to be your friend... :)
thank you

[Jade]

This is great! Keep writing, your style is very intresting

[Pax]

oh thank you.....I'm really glad you like it...

[Rhianne Ney]

I can agree for some reason because you talked about life and you have your own definition of it... Everyone defines life the way they see it, for me and that's how life exposes itself to us

[Pax]

thanks kabayan, I'm glad with your feedback....it's very much appreciated.

[Rhianne Ney]

I'm glad it was ^-^

[MOON]

Moving touching write that asks so many questions , those eternal questions surely there is more. Beautifully written as usual My friend.

[Pax]

moon, moon, moon... your presence brings light... I am grateful to you my friend...

[Leslie Philibert]

I really like this - a poem that tackles real big subjects, a mix of science and fantasy,and your very noble comments about your mother - a good write with an interesting style, good job.

[Pax]

thank you so much...

[Michael G.]

"I’m not a scientist, I’m not philosopher yet..."

Ah, but in my humble opinion, you may well be. Perhaps not to a high scholarly position; but, one smart enough to ask and ponder questions. And then, poet, you present them to us while reminding us to "not forget our balance."

[Pax]

yes balance is everything... thank you so much my friend...i really appreciate your thoughts....