Wondering thoughts

chapter 1

Bone is sitting in a Studio table of Mr. Wise’s Company while reading his contract and  thinking….

It’s been a month now, every day my longing for Lessie overwhelms my mood. I keep thinking of her, why didn’t I stop her from leaving the apartment. Now signing this recording contract made me realized how she pushed this to me. If it wasn’t for her I would never have done this. I missed her terribly. Being back in my home country felt like weird and these uneasiness is quite refreshing. I think being away for awhile was worth every dime. Nobody knows I’m back even my brother. This will be a fresh start for a career.

Lessie is sitting in her swivel chair facing the beautiful view of Vancouver in the glass window thinking…

It’s over a month now since I left Bone’s apartment. I’ve lost a lot of weight lately. Maybe I’m just depressed of the things that left off between us. Or it’s the stress in the Company lately. Since I broke the engagement, they didn’t pursue the merger and the Company is in struggle for income. The stock market is down, the economy is on recession. How will I start the Business back on track? A lot of pressure on me, its draining all of my energy.Now I wish Bone was here, he's usually good at this kind of problem.

Spine is in the garden. Drinking a cup of coffee while thinking about his brother….

It’s been four months now since my brother left us. I’ve manage the company really well and I’m getting married next month to my brother’s ex-girlfriend. It’s all good now, at first I don’t want to stand in my brother’s way, I even walk away from them to rekindle their relationship. Still it was much harder to repair than I thought it should be, until he let go of her as well as giving way towards our relationship. I felt thankful for him, to everything he has done to me. He always had my back since our parents died. I keep thinking that relationship is just cruel to him, even I, myself was horrible to him, his own little brother. Though I’m happy now but I kept blaming myself that I also drive my only brother away from us. I hope Lessie had convinced him to come back.

Cassandra is in the shower not minding the cold rush of water. She let it be, to wash away this uneasiness that won’t go away and thinking about Bone….

It’s been almost forever. I felt guilty towards Bone’s feelings. I know he give me the blessing in loving his brother. But something is missing. I felt this uneasiness. Carrying it like a burden at the back of my head. Maybe I just want his forgiveness. The unsorted feelings I have for him. I did love him before but it was in the past. He did drive my love away, pushing it to the limit until I was in the edge that I can’t take it anymore. I’ve learned to love his brother. I’m engaged to him now. All I want is for Bone to forgive us in person and to make sure his alright and doing well. Hopes he comes back.

Author's Note

this will be a new chapter for the up coming second book of moments o remember...
I'm still thinking about the tittle....
if i have some error please tell me...
or message me...
other than that enjoy..
if you haven't read the first book
the link is here: moments to remember

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

Hmmm.... very interesting, I see this is going to have some twisted love-interest and betrayal themes and perhaps more heartbreak along this story. i wonder how all of these characters will end up reconciling their feelings for each other & what happens with all of their burgeoning career dreams. Very curious to see where this is going! Some grammar errors with past/present tense. The previous book seems to be unpublished?

[Pax]

perhaps i am too ashamed but i am proud of that book because it lead me to think i am progressing and not stopping in writing stories..., I'll published it when the wc is not bugging me with the slow running progress... i am glad you are reading this my friend... yeah, i have some issues on grammar... often times i am blind on that part, with all the translating in my head its hard to cope up and write in english.... but i am slowly getting used to it...thanks big time my friend...

[Horizon K.]

Cool, well let me know if you put that one up... Hope Im not missing something essential in this one without that prequel... And we are always improving as writers, it's actually fascinating to watch others and ourselves in this process!

[Pax]

yup, i had published it... nothing much is missed... this chapter seems like a summary of the first one...

[Horizon K.]

ok, I will backtrack and read that one too:)

[RachelReaper]

Nice work! I think this is the first, if not one of the first, stories I've read from you (since your usually writing poetry), and I have to say, it's captivating. I was really into the story, and... I can sense upcoming drama!!!! Also, Spine is an awesome name, just throwing that in there.

[Pax]

oh, thank you..I thought Spine is a bit strange name...but i just based it on the brother...they are both name to a human body bones...yes i usually write poetry.. this story starts being poetic...it's just expands to a story itself..the first book actually is a mixture of poetic and script type...so i thank you for reading this..much appreciated..

[Mia]

You’re off to a good start. I think it has a lot of potential! I think that the thoughts are too detailed. When you think you don't really explain situations. You think about them but you don't explain them to yourself. You already know what’s going on. Maybe you could explain a little before you go into the thoughts. Things like..."I keep thinking of her" and "I’m back now, in my own country." are more narrative than thoughts. I hope I've been helpful! Thanks for sharing friend :)

[Pax]

thanks, I like that..I know its detailed maybe because...it's somehow a look back at things of the past..and i don't want the readers to get lost to what really happen...but then..i did give too much away...

[Mia]

You didn't give too much away. I just thought you could rephrase the thoughts. You'll find a good balance! You always do :)

[Pax]

thanks..I'll solve that later on..

[Mia]

It's always a pleasure. I look forward to reading more :)

[Pax]

I have a question Mia, do you mind? how do you cope up in writing A next chapter if laziness and writer's block gets in the way?

[Mia]

One word at a time. You just have to sit down in front of your computer and take it one step at a time. Once you've started the laziness will fade. Writers block is the worst but you're a writer and you can overcome it. I'm suffering from "fear of writing". The writers on here are incredible and the more I read the more I feel my writing is not so good. I’m planning on sitting today and writing something…If I don’t believe in myself…how can I expect other to?

[Pax]

:) thanks for answering..I'm quite satisfied now..lol... fear of writing.. maybe your fearing too much that you're work is not good enough like the others you've read...i feel that sometimes...i just think of them as an inspiration to my writings...

[Mia]

It's a pleasure! I like that, I will think of them as inspirations too. And hopefully I will learn from them :)

[Pax]

they are indeed inspiration to us...we just have to think positive even though its hard to overcome the negativity in the head...knowing we can because like you said we believed that we can.

[Mia]

You are such a wonderful friend and I cannot tell you how grateful I am for you friendship.

[Pax]

I'm grateful with your friendship as well..we are here to help each others...

[Belle]

Nice Kabayan!
Evidently, you are also more than good in prose.
Why not dwell on this kind apart from poetry.
I mean, I am not an expert in scanning elements of fiction
from short story, yet this piece draws attention that took me to read
till the end, and I enjoyed reading!

[Pax]

Salamat kabayan....I'm glad you had enjoyed it..I'm still new to it...ang problema ko lang sa prose ay ang grammar...kaya I'm hesitant to post some of my story that need a lot of work...

[Belle]

Its okay, you will improve for sure.
English is only our third language so as expected
grammar is not perfect.
You can let other proofread your works.
That is what I do with some of my articles...

[Pax]

hope someday...Salamat ng marami..