Darkened Soul

a little dark..

In my darkest days, I held you beneath my warmth

You indulged me with your feverish hunger

You embraced me with your piercing emotions

You were immune to my changeable disease

I came to a realization that you were my muse

              The best rainbow I received……….

You told me that I was part of your soul

            To me you’re the fuel to my rusty engine,

                                     The energy to my thirsty being,

                         And the light of my darkened soul.

Author's Note

i don't know what to say...
would you share your thoughts about it?

Reviews

[Mia]

This is wonderful! I love the ending!
"The energy to my thirsty being,
And the light of my darken soul."
It is very evident that there is passion in this relationship and it's the kind of passion that just engulfs you. The kind of passion that’s dangerous but you just can't help yourself. Really great write!

[Pax]

You got it! that was the purpose and the dark side of it. Somewhat a dangerous love affair. Thank you my friend.

[Mia]

It's such a pleasure!

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Such an intriguing and one of a kind passionate relationship :) Well done. I personally liked this line:
You were immune to my changeable disease

I'm loving this poem and I believe that any woman would be happy to be the receiving end of this

Nice write :)

[Rhianne Ney]

I love the poem!
100/100

[Revery]

It's hollow feel in the soul when the relationship is barely real, just beyond our grasp, but the pain is oh so real and present. This write is absolutely fantastic Willyam, I have great admiration for your artistry my friend. 100

[Coyote Poetry]

"I came to a realization that you were my muse
The best rainbow I received………."
I like the poem a lot. I like the flow of thoughts and the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pax]

Thanks my friend, this poem is one of my favorites i made.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Wow! This is excellent, it's in your blood. In darkness all life is created.

[Pax]

really, thank you.

[eeoopig]

Amazing :) Beautiful and dark, just like the title (I loved how the ending was also the title :D). It was deep and really filled with meaning - great work

[Pax]

Hi my friend, thanks for the complement, I really appreciate that. Me too i liked it one..

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I really like this WillyamPax, it's unique and wonderfully written! I like the comparsions that are made throughout the poem. It makes it even more beautiful! I love the line "The best rainbow I received". That line in particular made me say aloud"Awwh", because it's sweet and somewhat touching. I must admit I like the ending the most though. "To me you're the fuel to my rusty engine,
The energy to my thirsty being,
And the light of my darkened soul". Keep writing, since your work keeps getting better and better--also very impressive too! :))

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Pax]

thank you so much my friend. I'm glad you liked it, what i like about this is its short but every line is meaningful to his love one..

I really like your ending comment, its like I'm on a game show..

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're very welcome and of course :) Yeah I like it for that reason too! haha and yeah that's my motto that I made while making my very first book :) it's quite catchy.

[An owl on the moon]

You mingle dark and light so deeply... the pure and profound moving within... another life that connects to the reality of you... It is bliss to find such a light when you live in shadows.

[Pax]

that's the goal mr. Craig, i wanted to write only dark emotions but my heart always sees this light in every darkness.. Thanks for making it realize to myself also.