We learned

Why are you trying to be someone that you’re not?

Why are you pretending to be happy that you’re really not?

Why do you keep on lying to yourself?

Why is your life very complicated? Or you’re just making it too complicated for us to bother?

Maybe you’re just emotionally damaged by your own selfish doing?

I get it, that you’re hard to deal with, I get that. Still you don’t have to push us away.

You don’t have to be so alone. You know we’re here to listen and guide you towards a better way.

We stick to you no matter what they say and what you’d become.
Because we know it’s still you, it’s a part of you.

We love you just the way you are, nothing can change that.

If you gone to a bad start, then let’s start a new better one.

Maybe for you it’s too late to start a better one, but life’s too short.

Let’s enjoy it, lived the way we want it to be.

Ha, you’re a late bloomer you say.

Nah, you’re just one of millions out there.

People learned new things every day; it’s never too late to learn. That’s one of my principles.

You’re doing good, listen to your good side. Listen to you pure soul. Hear its plea.

Flip every bad into an optimism to strive for the better.

You know we can, because we believe in us that we can.

Come let’s do this together start a new beginning.

Free from prejudice and judgments.

Let’s thanks sorrow and pain.

Without them we can never achieved what we are today.

Life isn’t easy, we know,

but we learned.

Author's Note

it can never be a poem, the critique said to be considered poetry must used imagery and metaphor..
i wrote it before the critique incident..

i wanna thank everyone's support
......that i can be my own
that this is poetry, a poetic expression of what i felt.

its the combinations of some of my drips of wisdom.

Reviews

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

lol, regarding your Author's Note, I for one find this writing beautiful, what was poetry, before someone put a name on it. Who made the standards? I want to be different as different as I can be, I see a line drawn...well it's the starting line for me! Nothing new under the sun..huh, well that’s because we follow rules. You write how you write till your heart and pin say stop. Then sit back and let others read from their heart. If someone looks too much at the meter and rhyme, well they are were missing the point the whole time, so let it flow how your heart and soul say so, I'll be hey to love what you write and read the words of your soul! This was a wonderful write in every single way, I loved it form word to word all the way to the last!

[Pax]

thank you meloday, i appreciate your words so much. it gives me hope. that i can be my own way. your world brightens my day on pondering of what went so wrong..I understand it now. thank U s much.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Rules have a place and time; creativity is not one of them. I look forward to reading writes outside the box...that’s my playground. Our souls are limited to our bodies...its words should have no boundaries. Write my friend with passion, sincerity and truth...never worry about the rest. Greatness starts when someone does what no one else will! I look forward to reading this, don’t you.

[Pax]

Yeah thank u, i feel blessed with your wisdom. Its great to have you as a friend.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

;)

[Leslie Philibert]

I think this is fine, I wouldn`t bother about what is considered poetry, it`s an endless subject, just write what you feel and then it`s O.K....

[Pax]

thank you, i feel much better with you and everyone's encouragement.

[asdarkeyesclose]

'You’re doing good, listen to your good side. Listen to you pure soul.
Hear its plea.'

There is so much positive energy in this i feel better myself- even though i'm quite balanced and not feeling depressed at all. i would describe this writing as moral support and we all need friends to lift us with a few kind words when we are sad or struggling with our lives. you spoke very well i don't see that it isn't poetry even though it doesn't fit the normal specs you mentioned. poetry is open to different interpretations but to put it in limited definitions of what it is is to not allow it its freedoms and unique qualities. fantastic.

[Pax]

thank you, i really appreciate your words. every words makes me feel better.

[Corset]

Personally I love this sort of spoken word, it helps me sort things out in my own head, the way to keep on track for myself and others, I think it's marvelous!

[Pax]

thank you y friend. im glad you can relate to it.

[Destructive Impulse]

Too angsty for my liking. Sorry

[Pax]

its ok, i thank you for reading it.

[Gothic Girl]

i can really relate to this. such problems do exist.

[Pax]

salamat, its great that you can relate.

[Geraldine]

Interesting and inspiring. Yes, we all do learn a lot and mostly from our hardships and pains which could make us a stronger and better person. Very well said and expressed.

[Pax]

maraming salamat kaibigan

[Geraldine]

walang anuman. :D

[Marie]

THis is not a meant to be a poem about imagery; it's meant to be a poem about ideas, and you express them well.

[Pax]

thank you Marie, i believed the critique said that people use some form of metaphor/imagery/etc in order for them to be considered more 'poetic' than basic sentences.
and Basic sentences is just what i see in some of my poems.
just ideas, my emotions and basic sentences that cant be considered poem..
that makes me really sad..

[Baby Ricochet]

Interesting and oddly optimistic. Good job