i get that

just a journal

You made me feel I'm really bad. I get that because you made me realized it. I know I'm wrong.
Now you made me fear critiques, just kinda for now. It's not that I hate you guys. It's just me I guess.
I don't want to feel so down with myself. It hurts its stings in the chest.
The critique said: Reading this won't be interesting unless you focus on the heart of what you wanna talk about.
I know it's not that interesting; I did put my heart into it. But then it's wasn't enough. So I get that.
Right now it is far too immature to really be improved beyond rudimentary expression..
But this something beyond my limits I guess.
. It doesn't seem that you have a firm grasp on the use of a creative voice.
I do have it but its seems to be more complicated that he thought should be, I wanna explain that my brain cannot translate everything I imagine. So I need to work on my vocabulary, I get that.
You made me realized that poetry is all about imagery, so I get that. So for now I'm gonna stop making one. Maybe just in the mean time I guess.
First the critique made me fear writing short stories, now poetry. Guess I have nowhere to run but just face the facts im not really good at anything for now.
I guess critiques can be very frustrating. They tend to find errors and leave the good points behind for you to understand that you don't have to hold on something that is good for you to get better. So another I get that now.

So may I suggest that leave some good points for the writer to ponder when they critique, so they're hopes would not be crushed too much.

Author's Note

just a journal coz i think it my poems are somehow immature and isn't poetry.
because as the critique said its all about imagery...

read my blog if you want to know more about the critique..
its not that rude, i just perceived it negatively.
may just too sensitive.. too egoistic..
sorry if i haven't review everyone lately..my read request is filling up..

Reviews

[Corset]

If all the artists took to heart all the bad reviews there would never be any expression for those of us who do enjoy art, all kinds, for every one artist there will be at least ONE who will enjoy your work and think that you are special, or have something special to give, someone gave me wonderful advice and i'm giving it back to you, do not listen to the critic of others, remain true to yourself and your own style, if we all wrote the same way what a freaking boring life we would have, who would want to read the same thing exactly the same way over and over again? not I that is for sure! Be your own unique self and express it in your own way!

[Pax]

wow, that's really a great advice. It hit me, like a rocket. it gives me hope again, because i really dont want to change the way i writer my style is my own way of expression.
you really help me my friend. Im glad that i leave the group in the other site. One reviewer there is really has some issues on me..
i really appreciate this..

[Corset]

You are welcome and she is one of the writers on here that I truly respect, her name is Rosalind Sophia Gale, you may even be familiar with her writes, she is genius on heels, so when she speaks I listen :)

I liked this insight Spider Girl, gossip is for the not living.... xo

[Corset]

Hi E.L., :) points upward...there is another incredibly special person above me here :) Beautiful mind, beautiful soul.

[Dhaye]

Oh, naman pala. Puro encouragement naman comments nila. Oo nga no. If only one person treated you wrong, there are still more who are at your side. Cge, Pax. Go tayo. Kahit ano pang itawag nila sa atin. Minsan kasi pag sobrang talino n ang tao parang sya n lang may K mag-suggest. Ganon din naman sya, di rin naman nakikinig.

[Pax]

or i remember nasa blog ko pala yung full story ~ an egoistic fooL~
I believe in this quote:
Everybody is a genius. But if you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will live its whole life believing that it is stupid. – Albert Einstein
~ you know ako yung naging fool, nito ~ kaya umalis ako doon, kaya ngayon rarely na ako pumopunta doon... salamat kabayan... i feel better now with my friends here....

[Dhaye]

Ah, the word fool is totally degrading. Ican't imagine myself a fool to somebody's eyes. Don't say that to yourself. Have you read my shoutout, yung nasa ilalim ng pen name ko? It's about an intelligend a fool. So, don't even give yourself a title like that.

[Dhaye]

Intelligent. Hirap magtype sa tablet. Huhu

[Dhaye]

Intelligent and a fool

[Pax]

sigh ~ I'm the worst critique of myself basta masyado akong down sa sarili ~
here paste ko dito yung journal ko before:
Dear Reader,





I am the most trying hard artist in this zone. I’m not good, I’m a fool who keeps fooling himself. Maybe I’m just good at expressing my thoughts In a simplistic manner that everyone can easily understand and relate into. I do often wonder the extent of my capability and it comes to a copycat version of what I read and felt.


Sometimes I’m just too dramatic, egoistic, and self-absorb foolish being. Money takes its toll on me, homesickness tackled my free will, and lastly negativity have embraced me.


I’m too selfish and cynical for my own good. Guessing I will not improve myself, for the fact that improvement starts with oneself will to change. I feel like giving up in breaking this chain that binds me. I’ve tried my best to be in the light of the stars beyond me. They’re very out of reach. Still the shine makes me believed and hold on to hope’s hands. And he said your fate might be dark but your heart shines, don’t turn it off. You have this empathy to sad things that it burdens you downward towards darkness. Have faith and believed that you can.

I want to thank everyone for believing in my work. Everyone’s light shines on me, it’s just me who don’t believe. Believing that you can, to push yourself beyond your limits because I often limit myself in doing the things i felt I can't.

Peace of mind is the hardest to achieve. Maybe I just don’t have the right tools to succeed. All I can say is that Tranquility’s peace is clouded with reality’s fuggy fate.


W.Pax

[Dhaye]

Hmnn. I hope wala na yang feelings na yan. Smile ka na. Nakaka-smile na ang lola nyo oh. Kasi nakahinga na ako ng sama ng loob sa inyo. Thanks. Smile smile lang :)

[Pax]

yan smile na si lola... :) thanks kabayan

[Renée]

You should write it in your native language see how much the critic knows then ! lol
Your doing fine..there is always room for growth for all of us... keep writing !!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

I see what your saying I think. Being on her a week and looking at the reviews and critiques that are handed out on here, I have noticed in the main they all seem to be overly nice (in the hope of getting a positive review back?) but when there is a rare criticism they cut right to the bone. I personally from this day forward am going to right longer balanced reviews saying what was both good and bad about a certain piece. Yes I want to know my work is good but I want to know its faults, so I can improve my writing.I have only received positive reviews so far, that cant be right?? Am far from perfect. I want to know the good the bad and the ugly.

[Pax]

i know what you mean, i feel that this critique is being rude to the point you can't stand up. for me being a critique is balance. You see the good and the bad. You need to point the two or you will leave the writer fall down to its darkness.
And about the many here are not professionals but i did see some. They will see the fualt up to the last line but then you need to critique them in the same way but it really depends that he/she see something special in you.

[Pax]

Oh dear friend, this hurts me, if it hurts you...
I guess you have to keep on believing in yourself, and those
who do in you. :) *smile* from over here.
There are two typos of reviewers, here, the one who seek errors
And the one who truly love to help.
I guess you have a perfect sense to forfeel.

We all love to stand open for positive critisism, but
Some people don't have feeling, less than getting better
Themselves, over a back of another.

I loved your honesty in this write, and I believe in you! always!

E.L.

[Pax]

thanks for standing besides me, i feel much better with you and everyone's encouragement. why is its easy to write an advice than to work with it Like~ flip the bad to an optimism to strive for the better.~ i keep saying that to myself after the critique incident. It just sunk in after everyone's support and encouragement. So thanks to you my friend.

[Baby Ricochet]

Everybody gets bad reviews William. Personally I love your poetry. WritersCafe wouldn't be the same without your voice so please keep posting them. I got slammed in a PM for "Hookers and Crack," a lecture on morality during war from a guy that had never been in one for "Don't judge me." ( He did the very thing the title said not to) a finger wag from one of the star poets on this site for "Stupid Poem." and a host of other less than kind remarks. It's a risk that comes with putting your work on a public forum. SO as the old saying goes "If they can't take a joke, f**k em.

[Pax]

thank you my friend. and there is an old saying you cant please everyone.
maybe we're just unique,like you, like me, like everyone is.
Thank you for sharing, i didnt know that you deleted the first post, and you
were affected by someone.
i feel so affected because the critique made me feel like
im an egoistic unintelligent moron, that is incapable of his own
understanding(point of view). that's why i like what miss spice girl(see featured review) reviewed on me.

again thanks for the encouragement and support, i greatly appreciate that.

[FJ Davis]

Pursue your own suggestion of enriching your vocabulary; that is something we writers and poets should always be trying to do.
Don't attempt to improve too many things at once; you'll feel overwhelmed.
You obviously have a strong desire to communicate, and possess the grit to pursue that desire--combined with some hard work, these may be all the "qualifications" you need to attain writing fulfillment.
Don't ever quit, Will!

[Pax]

thank you so much mr frank. i was about to quit coz i feel that im not good at anything in writing prose to poem, but with yours and everyone's encouragement it really helps, i feel better.

[Marie]

William you are taking the wrong thing too much to heart. Think of all the good reviews you've received and all the encouragement. You brood about one critical review. And really revies are not as important as what you think of yourself.

I think someone was trying to help you but going about it the wrong way. You have to keep writing and improving yourelf.

[Pax]

that's why i like it here, everyone's encouragement really helps. that's what i received in the other sites..
thank you marie, your a great deal of help to me.