State of being there

A prisoner of your own doing
Selfishness is a way of avoiding
Stay fair by just merely existing
Pain and craving
Lock and stored in a well-guarded place
Hunger made it hollow in this well hidden base
Loving from a distance
Shielded by masquerade
Full of charade.

Author's Note

an old poem i dug up..
i think i forgot what i felt when i wrote this..
or i just want to forget..
i did rhyming here, i did not know i was capable of it, before..
i just like free-verse...for now.
tell me what your thoughts about this..

Reviews

[reflectingus]

Your poem raises a thrilling puzzlement, it's like reading through lines and digging deep, beyond the fake smiles, where we hide our true selves, where we're much too pleased burying it all, pretending that nothing happened. Speaks the truth about life, hinted with beautiful poetry.

[Coyote Poetry]

Easy to hide and hard to show the world what we need and want. A very strong poem. I like the description and the purpose of the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pax]

as always mr. Cayote...its a pleasure to see your around in my work...
thank you so much...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[eeoopig]

Your first rhyme? It's great! Most of my poems rhyme... It was mysterious, yet I felt that the narrator was sad and lonely. Good work

[Pax]

he is indeed! thank you

[Carolyn Falls]

Very isolated feeling, good write.

[Laura Maidah]

You have a lot of connections here that could work if you explained yourself please

[BlackRose]

This is great work. Rhymed very well. Has that sort of mystery but some pain thrown in there. The last two lines are superb endings.

[Pax]

thanks for the great praise. I love the ending lines too..

[Barbara Walker]

The entire poem is great, but I love those last two lines! One of those lines would make a great title for this piece.

[Pax]

thank you. me too i like the last two lines it reminds me that i still have my masked on..

[FJ Davis]

One goes in a number of different directions while reading this piece. As Isolated phrases, the poem could--to some extent--be discussed.
I prefer to be mystified by words and concepts that seem to swirl together; vaguely indicating something I'm not destined to completely understand.
Fascinating, Will!

[Pax]

mystified a and fascinating are a very high praise for me, so thanks you very much.

[emmajoy]

Seems that being aware, and protective of self, helps to resist outside influences as well as resisting unwanted extreme emotions.

There's more than appears here but perhaps your eagerness to rhyme, to use meter, slightly muddled one or two meanings.. That doesn't detract from the depth of your intention, however. :)

[Pax]

I have respect for you dear soul friend, Having the ramadan in highly summer, when the evenings are full of light, and the spirit gets improved of the strength to fight, until it's dark, and you can eat as you passionately write with energy and figtht the hunger demons of the day, in a faith and balance in your way. So beautiful, rich and painted like an oil painting dear poet! :)

E.L. X

[Pax]

thanks you so much my dear friend. your words made me to never give up...