You & I

       

Would it be okay if I say, I’ve had enough of your presence in my life?

You’re too much of everything I hate

of all the things, you annoy me.

I wish you were gone and would fade away like you never existed.

But still you were there reminding me

of all the wrong things,

The bad memories,

The irritating personalities,

                   The foolish behaviors,

                                      The selfish self,

                                                   and lastly

               The sad and gloomy

                State of mind.

I did something to hide you,

I can simply toss you aside,

Put a mask on your face,

        Do a charade

              Making you aware that you don’t exist,

              and a complete cover-up of make belief.

I’ve done everything possible I can to coat or erase your every existence

But then I realized you’re a part of me

That can never be erased

A reflection of me

The reality of me

 

You can never be without me   and    I can never be without you
because

all in all

you’re
me.

Author's Note

I did alot of edit in this one, its that i have some typo errors..
if you see anything just message me. thanks
enjoy.

i wrote this when i was really down with myself
i always blame myself.
thanks to all of the encouragement of WC friends here
Im glad i feel better now,
i got up, and keep strong in this life's challenges,
like i said in my drips of wisdom #5

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

This is tremendous!!!
The deep regret and self hatrid and perhaps blame laying waist to a mind. Articulated with a true talent and a great way with words.

There are alot of littered spelling mistakes, and general errors. That make it a little difficult to read in bits but a good proof-read will remove those.

[Pax]

done it, thanks.

[poeticpiers]

To accept yoursel warts and all is the beginning of wisdom

[Pax]

oh i dont have a virus..lol...just joking..i know what you mean..

[BillyGirl]

Great write :) I love the formatting too

[ewest1220]

I agree with Ama May Cooper what an awesome read! Thank you so much for sharing this!

[Jamal]

wow someone's battling some powerful inner demons. intense.

[Barbara Walker]

yes, even if you are speaking of yourself or another, everyone you have a relationship with, becomes a part of you to some extent.

[Cole Hayley]

I love love love love loeve loveovoeoveoeo the format. Like a random scatter of words. The poem itself is beautiful, as expected from you.

[RachelReaper]

Great job how you arranged the words in the poem, and the poem itself was interesting to read throughout, altogether another well thought out writing piece by you! Loved it, though I am sorry you sometimes feel this way.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This must have been a painful write, my friend. It is full of raw emotion that comes through loud and clear. Don't we all feel this way sometimes? The enemy within...the one who knows all our secrets, our faults and mistakes, that ever lurking know-it-all that we must face every single day. The picture is fantastic...love the way you did it.

[Pax]

thanks, glad you noticed the picture, its my work and its me. ;)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

:)

[Owlgirl]

Wow! I love the formatting you used! The spacing is incredible! Amazing poem, it;s very well done and well written. The emotions are clear and well done, awesome writing! Into my library it goes!

[Beau-dee-loot]

I think we're all like that sometimes, pretending to hate the things we most cherish as a defense against misery, madness; the poetical catharsis serving only to remind us of the subject's import, rendered in something as bleakly beautiful as they have now become to us in their estrangement, rejection, disappearance.

[Admiral Kirk]

This is very deep and beautiful, and very telling. Excellent work. The only mistake I caught is that in the 2nd line from the bottom, your should be you're. But great job! Fantastically deep, and well written. :D