You & I

       

Would it be okay if I say, I’ve had enough of your presence in my life?

You’re too much of everything I hate

of all the things, you annoy me.

I wish you were gone and would fade away like you never existed.

But still you were there reminding me

of all the wrong things,

The bad memories,

The irritating personalities,

                   The foolish behaviors,

                                      The selfish self,

                                                   and lastly

               The sad and gloomy

                State of mind.

I did something to hide you,

I can simply toss you aside,

Put a mask on your face,

        Do a charade

              Making you aware that you don’t exist,

              and a complete cover-up of make belief.

I’ve done everything possible I can to coat or erase your every existence

But then I realized you’re a part of me

That can never be erased

A reflection of me

The reality of me

 

You can never be without me   and    I can never be without you
because

all in all

you’re
me.

Author's Note

I did alot of edit in this one, its that i have some typo errors..
if you see anything just message me. thanks
enjoy.

i wrote this when i was really down with myself
i always blame myself.
thanks to all of the encouragement of WC friends here
Im glad i feel better now,
i got up, and keep strong in this life's challenges,
like i said in my drips of wisdom #5

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

This is tremendous!!!
The deep regret and self hatrid and perhaps blame laying waist to a mind. Articulated with a true talent and a great way with words.

There are alot of littered spelling mistakes, and general errors. That make it a little difficult to read in bits but a good proof-read will remove those.

[Pax]

done it, thanks.

[poeticpiers]

To accept yoursel warts and all is the beginning of wisdom

[Pax]

oh i dont have a virus..lol...just joking..i know what you mean..

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A dark and poignant piece. I get the sense of purging with this one. Sometimes, writing it out is the only way to make it go away, at least momentarily. I truly love the flow of this one, and the way that the expressions are so intricately revealed. Well done !

[gabrielle]

There will always be stage in our lives that we are confronted with self-doubt and negativity. i think that makes us human and not robots. pessimism is part of our nature but how we handle such adversity/pessimism would give us the character. i must say that you are very creative in fighting your inner demons kabayan. keep it up!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I can relate to this poem so much, and I believe that's the best part of this composition.

I know that humans are very complex creatures, with a wide range of emotions, and it's nice to see you've managed to capture all of that in here.

After reading this poem, I also started wondering whether or not we're unhappy because our lives are imperfect, or because our emotions are all over the place. Provocative thoughts like these are another sign of a meaningful poem.

[Androglossia]

When we don't know who to hate, we hate ourselves and the feeling grows within us like cancer. It gradually eats us up like a three-year old kid devours sunny side up. There is a lot of angry words here, self loathe and blames. They're like hot coals you throw at a mirror only to see them getting back at you. Then you get burn. This is an intense write, kabayan. Keep your cool. There's time for everything.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

now i see the other piece a bit differently since reading this.

the battle of self...trying to get rid of the part of us that is poison to the rest.

the "selfish self"


this is quite good...