sometimes loneliness/boredom makes you do something you might regret.
so stop while you still can..or think twice before you do it.
I made something much dark poetry..
when i wrote this there is something terrible/horrible about it.
i donno you judge
good and bad reviews are welcome and very much appreciated.
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This poem seems to me to mean more than just lonliness, it seems like there are so many interwoven meanings and theme's within this poem. I see corruption , i see childish dreams and dashed hopes, anger.. there is so much emotion printed into this piece and you masterfully present them all in a very well flowing piece.
I like the way you have presented the poem, the movement in the last line actually seems to be the brain making the realsation and makes it feel much more personal.
Lovely work
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
wow, you touch so many themes than i ever thought and i think you hit it all. thank You.
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Oh my friend, you felt the inner boiling of the highest point to cool down, and relax after, such a good poem about daily feelings which can pass by. I felt the realness in this poetic piece, and recognized a lot of strength you have. Amazing dear...
Keep on penning!
E.L.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thank you, there is a saying patience is a virtue.
It seems a human flaw to relish that which should come with a warning! :) Beautifully expressed love...tense and lamentful...claustrophobic and yet liberating too, loved it xoxo
Great job WillyamPax....idle hands are the devil's workshop..
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thanks, its the first time i've heard about the saying..like someone said in the review..and its rea.. read morethanks, its the first time i've heard about the saying..like someone said in the review..and its really fits what i mean in the poem..glad you enjoyed it.
Well, I have to say, I found this rather enigmatic, until I read sir joe's review. This is an aspect that hadn't occurred to me, but these words do fit that situation! So, now I have to say, excellent write!
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thanks, yup sir joe's review really fits the situation which actually i didn't expect to be like tha.. read morethanks, yup sir joe's review really fits the situation which actually i didn't expect to be like that, its indeed fun to read it. many thanks again.
I believe the saying is "idle hands are the devils playground" or something like that. I have on many times done things that if a higher power wasn't watching me who knows what would have happened. But those were in my younger days. Now when I am bored I write, play a game, pick up a book and read to keep from getting myself into a situation that I can't control. But a lot of people, children, adults do things to entertain themselves and often end up hurting themselves and others in the process. Good write
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Yes! That's the one! :)
12 Years Ago
i never heard of that saying or proverb like what google said about its meaning. and your indeed tru.. read morei never heard of that saying or proverb like what google said about its meaning. and your indeed true about it like what i said in the authors note. thanks for the review and the great info.
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I am Willyam Pax from the Philippines and now residing here in Saudi Arabia for work. I am not a writer but a sensitive aspiring artist who expresses himself into .. more..