DarK Silence

Listen to the silence

Corrupting the innocence

 

Savour its taste

Awaken its craze

 

Go and feel the sound of emptiness

Stuttering calmness

Makes my blood boil

Tightening thrill

Gets my nerves straight

in the realization of my Loneliness.

Author's Note

sometimes loneliness/boredom makes you do something you might regret.
so stop while you still can..or think twice before you do it.
I made something much dark poetry..
when i wrote this there is something terrible/horrible about it.
i donno you judge
good and bad reviews are welcome and very much appreciated.

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

This poem seems to me to mean more than just lonliness, it seems like there are so many interwoven meanings and theme's within this poem. I see corruption , i see childish dreams and dashed hopes, anger.. there is so much emotion printed into this piece and you masterfully present them all in a very well flowing piece.
I like the way you have presented the poem, the movement in the last line actually seems to be the brain making the realsation and makes it feel much more personal.
Lovely work

[Pax]

wow, you touch so many themes than i ever thought and i think you hit it all. thank You.

[audrie]

I absolutely love this - very powerful - nice work

[Celestial Witch Child]

I am intrigued. You conjured up a highly unusual image to write about, but portrayed it quite nicely. Quality work.

[Laura Maidah]

Your rhyme choices are questionable. Expand on the first two stanzas. They are quite powerful.

[Pax]

thanks, i can't expand it anymore. I find it mysterious, so its quite ok the way it is..

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the directness and desire in the description. Made the reader feel the thoughts and loneliness. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Pax]

always a pleasure. thank you.

[eeoopig]

This can be so true. Too much alone time can change a person, in so many wrong ways - good job, you have captured this. I love the way you have formatted this as well :D

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I agree with you. Loneliness leads to depression, and depression makes us desperate, so we do all sorts of things we normally wouldn't. I like the darkness in this poem, you used it perfectly to bring out the messages.
Keep it up!

[MOON]

Poignant write scary feeling. I have a sense of ending it all kind of thing, depression.

[Pax]

that just one thing on the theme. thank U

[GunMetal]

I hear ticking in the silence. Like dawn, about to crack. Loneliness can be like that. Well done.

[Arik]

Sometimes their is nothing scarier than being alone with ourselves and I feel this poem captured that beautifully.

[Pax]

i know right, that makes t scary. thank U.