She was, but she is no more.

  When you see her, the first thing you would think is that she is no fun, that she is one of those boring girls who don't talk at all, have no social life and are friendless. Only a part of that judgement is true, though, she was quite popular, but she didn't participate in conversations. Now you see, she is not speechless or anything, she was just a quiet one. She had quite a lot of friends to whom she was always nice, but only six of all those people mattered in her eyes. Each of those six is completely different from the other, fate brought them together, but she was the one who kept them from breaking apart, because she always knew what's wrong with who and how to fix the problem. She was like an understanding mother to them all, and when she hugged them, a feeling of being wrapped in high quality silk engulfed them. She was warm and loving, and even though she rarely spoke, she always knew what to say. Sometimes she was harsh and quite pushy, and they got mad at her, but they always knew she was right and only wanted what's best for them, and so they were convinced and did what she said.
  Because she was quiet, she had the chance of noticing the small things that no one would usually notice. In a second she would enter the depths of your soul, and with a magical hand she would heal even the smallest of the injuries that the time left behind. With one look she could tell that a smile is fake and that there was something wrong, and then she would smile at you, and dear God how beautiful and soothing her smile is ! it makes you want to confide in her, and you do and never regret that you did. 
  But because she was quiet, no one noticed she was broken, and even though she noticed pretty much everything, no one noticed anything about her, and they all thought she was a happy angel, but, the truth is, her demons were too much for her to handle alone, and no one heard her cry for help, so she sought relief elsewhere.
  And now her memory is what holds those six together, who blame themselves for not paying attention, for never looking beneath the surface. And because they were focused only on themselves, they lost something that kind of made them who they were.
  And so she was, but is no more.
  

Reviews

[Dante Carlisle]

There are a few issues here that I found. One was the run-on sentence:

Each of those six is completely different from the other, fate brought them together, but she was the one who kept them from breaking apart, because she always knew what's wrong with who and how to fix the problem she was like an understanding mother to them all, and when she hugged them, a feeling of being wrapped in high quality silk engulfed them.

Perhaps break it when you begin the statement 'She was like an understanding mother to them all. Also, I noticed the word quite used instead of quiet, Those are the kinds of spelling errors that throw people off, and can remove them from the story. Especially other writers. We all tend to flinch a bit when we see a word used a few times that was incorrect.

As for the story itself, which is always the most important thing, I loved it. The idea behind it is great. Any time I read something that makes me want to read more is a plus in my book. That's the benchmark I use: Give me something I want to know more about, and I have to say it's a good thought.

Thanks for sharing!!

[Wiif]

Hey, big thanks for the review ! As for the use of Quite and Quiet, the first one and was meant to be quite, because the meaning I wanted to convey was ' totally, completely ', for the second one I didn't even notice that I misspelled it ! Thanks for pointing it out though, I can fix it now. Same thing for the sentence, it was meant to be a new sentence, it just slipped my mind when I typed it.
Thank you very much one more time though, I really appreciate the critic ! :D

[J. K. Beach]

Wiif,

This is lovely! What a touching portrait of friendship (at least in the beginning).

But, it is true that we often miss signs of distress especially in someone who is the glue that ties together a group of friends. Because of their seeming strength, we assume they are whole even it we aren't or she isn't.
The friends shouldn't blame themselves over much, but it is sad that they lost so vital piece of themselves. This is a beautiful little story told well! Nice work!

[Wiif]

Thank you for the review, I really appreciate it :)