The Truth of Infatuation

Void

Empty darkness is all I can see

Looking through the windshield

She takes my hand, lust takes hold;

I cannot yeild

 

Elation

Higher and higher did we fly

Gravity is nothing

Feeling invincible i cannot die

.

 

Ripping

Tearing through emotions,

shredding every thought, body and mind are severed.

We lay tethered

Together, like an old radio casette and pen...

 

Void

Empty darkness is all I see

Author's Note

this poem was written by chris black.
its about my experience when one experiences the rebound

Reviews

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

proud of u boys nice poem

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

I'm not one to comment about love or any feelings related to it but I say that it really looks hard but I mean that as a compliment meaning that you have expressed your feelings nicely and orderly

Thank you for sharing

[Kelsey]

This is beautiful. I love that it starts and ends with the same thing, all based around one strong word. Great job.

[Truth_About_Rain]

Brilliant! :D
Good rhyme! :D Love the way you start the stanza with one word and then write about it.... Really flows well!! Love the second last stanza! like the metaphor there although I don't get it :P It gives a sort of mood... mmm....

[John Mark Willhite]

Very nice, good job ! Concise, to the point, and relevent to everyone.

[Ama May Cooper]

Wow what a somewhat dark and mysterious tale.
what an interesting idea for a rebound, i can't say i see the realtion but the poem in itself is brilliant and powerful, the flow is immense and it conjours up such great imagery.
I have an image of it like a crash only the rebound is like a saviour till you realise they were imaginary in teh last moments of death... lol but that's just my take on it.

[Bluefire]

Good job I really like it, very meaningful. :3

[Carly Rose]

The rhythm /flow was great. Great word choice.

[b.platte]

Mhm. The vicious cycle of relationships. You got this spot on. Nice job.

I love how you pointed out each step and then delved further into explaining them... with beautiful words. :) I liked it.

[SmileBig :)]

Yes! I really like this! Nice flow, and I love how you started and finished with "Void empty darkness is all I can see." really well done :)