yellow

beautiful, you are,
because you know and act,
as if you don't know,
you are beautiful
i could look at you,
for the rest of my life,
fall in and out of love,
i'll fall back to you,
no ***t, i am real,
but are you or are you -
please, i need to believe,
will you make me believe?

Reviews

[Bacchus]

Had to check this out-
I have a poem called yellow too. :)
There is something beautiful about things that are and don't know how they shine.
I like how you can fall in and out of love with this-
interesting one.

[highonwords]

thank you my friend for the lovely comment and visit :)

steph

[Brenda Woods]

Great work - it flowed nicely and the last two lines were definitely hard hitting. Personally I'm not a fan of the censoring; I suggest you change the wording or change the rating for the poem instead of censoring out the word - but that's my personal opinion :P

The line after reads a little oddly to me 'but are you or are you' - is that perhaps a typo? I think it'd make more sense to be written as 'but are you or aren't you', so that the 'or' in the middle isn't made redundant, does that make sense?

Other than that, I really liked it. Short and sweet, but beautifully portraying the doubt and questioning that can come with relationships.

[highonwords]

it's not a typo - it's the speaker desperately wishing that the beloved is real, that the beloved could love the speaker in the poem - leaving all other options out :) thank you so much for the lovely insight and visit :)

best,
steph