wallflowers

the song about the wallflower
who wouldn't die from the cold
outside the window sill,
just beyond the warmth
of the room across your eyes,
before you blinked,
i was gone, the room remained
as solitary as we were,
and that was the only comfort
we had before the air became still,
life went on, for both of us,
always stranded, somewhere

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and sometimes life going on without each other, even if we feel stranded, might hurt but still might be for the best. We won't die from the cold, just shiver a little before the next breath of warmth grabs our heart.

[highonwords]

nice insight jacob - thank you so much my friend :)

steph

[Lyn Anderson]

sometimes being a wallflower is not a bad thing.

[highonwords]

it really isn't if one knows how to look for the other wallflowers :)

steph

[V]

I'm into the development and last line of the poem. A certain kind of solitude, of calmness makes one read it slowly but tensed in a way.

[highonwords]

thank you my friend for the comment and visit :)

steph

[Érenn]

I really like this a lot steph. The structure is maintained well throughout the poem, Also like the way you create a very refreshing imagery of the wallflowers. I think this one's more on the lines of not really waiting an moving on with life. Or one could presume the fact that this one's about chasing something and not waiting for it to come to you. Well at least that's what I got. Love the brevity of this write, gives the perfect impact. Also nice alliterations in between ^^ well done Thank you for sharing ^^

[highonwords]

thank you so much, my friend, for the wonderful insight and visit :) much appreciated :)

read morethank you so much, my friend, for the wonderful insight and visit :) much appreciated :)

steph

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like wildflowers myself. ;o) I thought this would be about the shy type of girl who stood alone at the prom by the punchbowl waiting for someone to ask her to dance. I guess there are more types of "wallflowers".

[highonwords]

there's a bunch of wallflowers out there - i am a wallflower sometimes - i just wouldn't stop waiting for good things to come, despite the cold being left out - thank you for the review and visit :)

steph

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Sometimes you've just got to dance to your own tune whether others hear your music or not. Take confidence in being who you are and be the best you...or as old Shaky Spear liked to say in paraphrase, be true to yourself.That way, when someone comes along who appreciates you, it will be for your true self and not some momentary wile. Wallflowers are nice if they are such because they need care and nurture. But flowers should be appreciated wherever they grow for all are beautiful and special miracles.

[highonwords]

wow, my friend, thank you so much for the wonderful insight and lovely visit - your message is truly inspiring, very positive :)

steph