thoughts over coffee in the afternoon

who were you thinking
when you think of anyone
who could love you,
the way you love someone,
who doesn't love you,
you don't think of love,
anymore the way you used to,
since you found love remains
parallel with how much life
you could only give away,
the line you intersect
doesn't curve to a circle,
embracing you, you thought
you'd remain a faint line,
across the world's face,
not a gash, but a line,
not leaving a trail away,
you've forgotten your own face

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

we all leave our mark in someway only to have it erased over time. A nice write!

[highonwords]

you are right, andrew :) thank you, my friend for the comment and visit :)

best,
read moreyou are right, andrew :) thank you, my friend for the comment and visit :)

best,
steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we wonder if we will leave a mark on the world, and yet at times we can't even remember ourselves...

j.

[highonwords]

thank you, my friend, for the wonderful comment and visit :)

best,
steph

[Lyn Anderson]

This feels like a person who is deeply disconnected and separated -- wondering about his or her place in the world.

[highonwords]

kind of, i think - i'll ask him/her first and then i'll write a poem about his/her answer :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Rambling thoughts leaving me to think you are describing a person who just lost a love or a person who feels insignificant in the mind of the world. Interesting write. Lydi**

[highonwords]

i think it's both - since the beloved becomes the whole and only world for the lover - but since the beloved doesn't love the lover - the lover thinks he has lost the world along with the beloved - thank you so much for the insight and lovely visit - been missing you :)

steph

[Lydia Shutter]

I have posted.

[highonwords]

i have read and commented on your poem, my friend :) please post some more - and i'll read and review it :)

steph