when you look in my eyes, because you want to see her, i let you find your way, uncertain of the compass - where your heart is taking us going South with you, with lost predilection when i'm way up North, in my head, you are the East to my sun, the deep purple dipping out my heart to a resolution of infinite definiteness, you turn me into a new moon every time, fading faraway, farther West of your blue-streaked feelings, but for you i always rise
Such a sad piece, I liked the use of compass directions to illustrate the sense of disconnection in this piece. I liked the sparse disjointed language use , it suited the stark mood.
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Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you so much, my friend, i believe the disjointed lines were meant to add to the twist and turn.. read morethank you so much, my friend, i believe the disjointed lines were meant to add to the twist and turn of the whim of the one being addressed to by the speaker in the poem, which would have driven me crazy, if i were the speaker :)
Beautiful poem! I really like the use of both the compass and color imagery. Those two simple elements are able to portray a myriad of different emotions and relationship facets in this piece. Nicely done!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you so much my friend for the lovely review and visit :)
NOTE: Formerly my pen-name on this site is letterhead, but since i also have an account on DeviantArt, with a different pen-name, which is highonwords (stephanie) - i am going to use highonwords here .. more..