the impossibilty of a possibility of us, in an impossible world

honestly, guys, did the poem connect to you? or is it hard to understand and relate to? i need feedback, thank you, guys :)

i miss you, it is impossible,
not to, when it is impossible,
to not fall in love with you,

i love you, it is possible,
to love you the way it is to love,
myself, when i am being who i am,

which is impossible, sometimes,
when the world is being what it is,
which is impossible, sometimes,

will you be the possibility
of possibility in my impossible life,
i could be the impossibility

to your possible life,
which for you would be impossible,
making you possible for me

to love always impossibly,
there is a possibility,
in an impossible world

which for us, makes the world,
possible, sometimes

Reviews

[Workvio]

If one finds true love then anything and everything is possible, and the only things not possible are the things we simply choose not to do in ruling out any possibilities of losing such a treasure, once found ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh yes, an impossible world it is...and love does seem an impossibility for so many because of that...the world makes us feel impossible to love because we deal with what we deal with...but if two who feel impossible meet on some level of possibility...they can face the impossible together, possibly.

j.

[highonwords]

oh, thank you so much jacob for the insightful comment and wonderful visit - wonderful word-play in your comment - appreciate it very much :) made me smile :)

best to you,
steph

[emmajoy]

'.. when i am being who i am, -- -- -- which is impossible, sometimes, - when the world is not being what it is, - which is impossible, sometimes, .. '

Smiling at the skill of this but yet have to read it a dozen times of more to... discover the possibility of all things being possible.

This is a poem to love with a difference; tis eye.catching, skilled and with hints of great humour!

[highonwords]

wow, thank you, my friend for being the first to tell me something about this poem - i wasn't sure if it will work - the word play needs to be read with dedication and patience - do you think there are rough edges to it that i ought to polish - please do tell me - thank you so much :)

regards,
steph

[emmajoy]

Re--typed my response: I don't like to advise people how to word original 'word-play'. For me your poem is charming, fun and also, (without analysing it phrase by phrase - which could take a lifetime at my snail speed!) makes sense - smooth as smooth as it can and should be. Please don't fiddle with it.. tis clever. amusing and more.

[highonwords]

wow, thank you so much - is that the brutal truth - or are you just being nice to me - i appreciate the kindness, but somehow i have doubts with this poem - i don't know - but thank you, really, please don't take this for rudeness, i just really want to be better at writing is all :)

best,
steph

[emmajoy]

I'd be a terrible reviewer if I behaved like that. Truth is if I have real concerns or criticsims i send a message.. rarely comment negatively in public, think that's mean and rude. In your case i've told you the truth. Cross heart. :)

[highonwords]

thank you, dear friend, for assuaging my doubts - i thought some reader would get this - there will be some, too, who might not relate to it and will consider the word play as brash and unbecoming for an aspiring writer - thank you, emmajoy, for being wonderful to tell me the truth in a polite way - always appreciate the kindness and sensibility in people :)

my best to you,
steph

[emmajoy]

Anyone 'who writes mean reviews should remember that he/she wasn't born with a lexicon or a book on How to write' in his/her hands! Write for yourself, read the old poets through to the modern ones when you have time... and just enjoy the pleasure of juggling words meantime. :) Must get out of here.. have a lovely day.

[highonwords]

a lovely day to you too, my friend :)

regards,
steph