middle of lost

middle of lost

A Poem by highonwords



i am one step closer to me
before i start the other way,
the start of you in me 

one breath to last me,
before i am blue in the mouth,
i am warm blood, frosting around the rim
of my heart

let my feelings run free,
you let them run wild,
over you, over me

into the blue moon's iris,
deep-set dawns, pointing to a star,
in the middle of lost,
waiting to be found




© 2016 highonwords


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Your words are well-crafted with lots of fresh, original-sounding imagery . . . however, I don't feel this piece coming together as a cohesive whole . . . maybe the seemingly-disparate observations are a way to show the sensations of being lost!?!?! Actually, the narrator sounds more intent on this other beloved person, than actually conveying a sense of being lost. Maybe he/she really knows on some level that he/she is falling in love, but feels more comfortable saying he/she is lost.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

there is a hesitation about falling in love with the person - the poetic subject is lost between fin.. read more

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NOTE: Formerly my pen-name on this site is letterhead, but since i also have an account on DeviantArt, with a different pen-name, which is highonwords (stephanie) - i am going to use highonwords here .. more..

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