almost heaven

almost heaven

A Poem by highonwords



if i were your heaven,
and love is the space,
below it, that keeps me
almost close to you,
then i'd rather be love itself
to suffer with you is almost heaven,
i'd have more of the ache,
i'd take some from you,
if you could go to heaven,
(i know, without me,
you wouldn't go)
if i were your love,
i'd be heaven below

© 2016 highonwords


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That 's selfless love. You will sacrifice just to be with your love one, for "love itself is heaven".
A suggestion:
"then i'd rather be love itself,
to suffer with you
is almost heaven,...."

I think it will have better flow if you won't break the "...love itself"
That's only a suggestion, but you are still the master of your piece. Lol

This is short but moving. Only few lovers can sacrifice for their love ones.

Well-written. Thanks for the share.



Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

ate dhaye, you are right - i corrected it na po :) thank you so much, ate - glad you like the poem p.. read more
separation from our loves is... hell
threw me back to "What Dreams May Come..."
such love.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

oh, i see - we really all have different challenges - different circumstances - different storiesread more
Bacchus

8 Years Ago

the two are separated by heaven and hell and he goes to rescue his love. Very touching.
highonwords

8 Years Ago

oh, you mean some fantasy is woven in the story? how does he rescue his love? did his love die in th.. read more
Heavenly poem (haha)
So nice, feels like a hug.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you so much for the kind words and lovely visit :) appreciate it very much :)

r.. read more
Heaven is like home...it is where the heart is. Lovely thoughts.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you, fabian, for the lovely visit and comment :)

regards,
steph

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NOTE: Formerly my pen-name on this site is letterhead, but since i also have an account on DeviantArt, with a different pen-name, which is highonwords (stephanie) - i am going to use highonwords here .. more..

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