to the woman, smoking a cigarette

the woman, smoking a cigarette,
blowing smoke in the air, in a corner,
oblivious, even meek, with her friends,
doesn't she have a lover, waiting
for her in a one-room apartment,
a crazy cat she shares her bed with,
two or three harmless pills,
with a glass of water on the nightstand,
they heard she was the other missus
of a wealthy john, how they met
in a bar out of town, said it was love
at first sight for him, gave her the key
to his penthouse, until the wife
jumped from their 20th-floor suite,
the man was inconsolable, lost his mind,
said the papers, the woman is pretty,
seems kind and innocent, just a girl,
they all sigh with serious pleasure,

just a girl

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

an unexpected one, this piece, a tightly woven little tale in poetic form.

[highonwords]

hi kl :) lovely to hear from you, my friend :) truth is i just jotted this down, like on a reporter's notebook, with little embellishment - just came out from the top of my head - a slapdash attempt at journalistic poetry - glad you like it :)

my best to you,
steph

[Lyn Anderson]

isn't that how all poetry goes? a couple of scribbles? The best inspirations come that way, in my opinion.

[highonwords]

some of my poems, my friend, came out like that - with little tweaking - but some urges me to work at them with my head and heart - thank you, kl, for being an inspiration :)

much love,
steph

[V]

Now this write has a twist, I'd say. An innocent but bleak description but turns out to be dark by the second part.
The two words just a girl read almost kind of intriguing. Good and entertaining one.

[highonwords]

thank you, vanessa, for the lovely comment and visit :)

best to you,
steph

[Bacchus]

Wish we could smoke all our scars away...
Don't judge, but do.

[highonwords]

hi bacchus - thank you so much for the wonderful visit and comment :) we all have scars - if we could smoke our scars away, i'd still choose to write my scars away - a lame attempt at a joke, sorry :) much appreciated, my friend :)

regards,
steph

[Lydia Shutter]

A dark scene painted very well, Steph. There are so many different stories that are not at first obvious when we see a person. Lydi**

[highonwords]

indeed, lydia - the world is so full of stories, waiting to be told - i'd like to get first bite on the pie of this giant stories - i've always wanted to be a journalist :)

always,
steph

[barleygirl]

WOW! This is quite a vivid portrait you've painted here, under the guise of a seemingly simple observation of this girl . . . ho-hum. An excellent way to suggest that there's a dramatic story behind every single one of us. No matter how calm a person may seem on the outside (or even more so, for the calm ones!) This is really impactful & well written . . . love the specifics you add to strengthen your message.

[highonwords]

we all have our own stories - our strengths and frailties spun in a yarn of human history - i love stories - thank you so much, margie, for the lovely visit and and insightful comment - here is a toast to all women, with a different story to share :)

much love,
steph