sienna

breath, close to your nape,
near your ear, lips, barely bruising
your stubble, there is no act,
more alive than this, we kiss,
we know this is opening doors,
without closing our eyes to the mood,
setting the southern breeze, deep-purple
sunset, no candles, just plain dark,
before a rogue moon, i was embarrassed
i am not like this, earnest and sweet,
so you kiss me over strands of hair,
on my forehead, even my hand,
when i saw the sun this morning,
i was alone, curious shadow of you,
you were with someone, who knows herself,
unalterably, with cold precision

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The thing I like most about your sensual & sensory writing: everything is NOT "perfect" (this is the way many people write such scenes, the other person is always perfect, not realistic!) I like that there are bumps in the encounter, like bruised lips & a rogue moon (good analogy). I also like the way you express very tentatively & subtly the conflicting feelings of attraction & also of being "put off" by this moment of passion.

[highonwords]

nothing is perfect in life - most things could only be almost perfect, then the sadness come in to people who see the glass as half-empty - i am glad the poem spoke to you, margie - thank you so much for your insight and lovely visit - appreciate it very much :)

always,
steph

[Lydia Shutter]

The REAL love as opposed to the one who wants something out of him....and he chooses the wrong one. Very sensual imagery in this one. I liked it. Lydi**

[highonwords]

thank you so much, lydia, for the wonderful visit and lovely comment - i appreciate it very much :)

always,
steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the act, the pretense...she is good at the role...but only gives what she wants him to see...who she really is hidden behind the cold calculating demeanor inside...

she protects herself, wisely i am sure.

j.

[highonwords]

thank you so much, jacob, for the wonderful insight and lovely visit - much appreciated :)
read morethank you so much, jacob, for the wonderful insight and lovely visit - much appreciated :)

regards,
steph

[Neville]

A very powerful and compelling poem with just the right amount of descriptive text to make it sensual and stimulating without going into any unnecessary detail and skillfully avoiding the tricky boundaries of erotica......All Good Things, N

[highonwords]

thank you so much, neville, for the wonderful comment and visit :)

my best,
steph

[Neville]

AGT's steph, N

[highonwords]

neville, if i may ask, what is AGT?

steph

[Neville]

Ha, All Good Things..............my sign off signature for more years than I care to remember AGT's

[highonwords]

oh, now i know - thank you, neville :)

steph