perspective

perspective

A Poem by highonwords




rubenesque you,
dense and heavy,
on my heart's palm,
with a strong sheen
a pungent scent
you make me burn
you paint my skin,
the same color,
as your eyes,
dawn, curdled on fire
same time, God
found you, a woman
lurking in the way
of His wide-set eyes
the desire of men,
to hold, in flesh,
in blood, in bones,
his whole life -
to pour as water pours
out of God's mouth
the green jungle,
is in my veins,
i look for you,
in the horrors of night,
the face of our child,
on constellations,
where our names
have been drawn,
since time was a cog,
in the throes of waking


© 2016 highonwords


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Once again, almost unintelligible to my PERSPECTIVE while reading this poem . . . often I will not comment on poems I don't understand. I don't want to assume the problem is with the poem. It might be a problem with my ability to understand. But in your case, I do want to comment becuz your writing is so amazing. I love your flow, your imagery, your total inhibition about throwing in wildly unexpected elements, describing them so vividly & poetically. Your originality is thru the roof! Good job on these very challenging aspects of writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

hi barleygirl -

peter paul ruben painted women, attractively plump - this means the w.. read more
barleygirl

8 Years Ago

I really love your writing. I love your messages, once you explain. I think some poetry just needs t.. read more
highonwords

8 Years Ago

i'm so sorry i gave you a difficult time - it should be that the reader should never be made to work.. read more
I see a husband thinking about his wife, or a man about a woman...

People need companion in this life. Someone who will stay by our side. Someone who will understand us or feel how we feel. Someone who will be with us to build a family.

Well-done piece of writing! Keep it up.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you, ate dhaye, for the visit and the review :)

steph
kind of that adam and eve feel....she was made for him---and he in his lack of intelligence imagines she was made to serve him...and then finds out much to his surprise...that he depends on her for sustenance much more than he would ever expected...

i like the really short lines...expedites the rhythm...to a nice fast beat.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

i wrote this like God was dreaming a woman (Eve) for Adam, that women were created as an equal compa.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

and they should be complementary to each other...some men are just not too bright.
highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you, jacob, you are a humble person

steph

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NOTE: Formerly my pen-name on this site is letterhead, but since i also have an account on DeviantArt, with a different pen-name, which is highonwords (stephanie) - i am going to use highonwords here .. more..

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