it moves me, this temporary room the rootlessness of us, this nameless love to near madness a pointed question, shamelessly drawn on my ragged face asking you for a haunting kiss, that keeps me awake, until night is a corpse, dawn is spilling blood from her wrists but you, my love, dream so helplessly of a church maiden parting you a kiss, from the marble steps, your feet await you, far from me
mmm, had a slightly different take on it. I view it as men/women interreaction. More like the woman has the power to move him and he feels helpless because he is powerless to resist her. So he violates her innocent trust---ah well you get the drift. I think it was very well done.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you, cyndy, for the review and visit - i am glad to read your interpretation, that it struck a.. read morethank you, cyndy, for the review and visit - i am glad to read your interpretation, that it struck a chord with you
really like the image of the dawn spilling blood from her wrists...
i tend to see the maiden as a virgin...keeping him away...then perhaps she gives in and feels the guilt...i was raised with that catholic guilt thing....and those pristine marble steps....but feet tread on them...and those feet aren't always so clean, or sin free.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you so much jacob for the correction - wasn't really sure where this poem was going - it was j.. read morethank you so much jacob for the correction - wasn't really sure where this poem was going - it was jumbled for a while - thank you for your review and visit - i think the church maiden is a idealized version of women, whom men take home to their families and marry - the other girl 'though in the poem is the opposite, although she loves the man and is patient with what he could only give her - i think one day he'll up and leave her, that is before she finds the will to leave him, first
NOTE: Formerly my pen-name on this site is letterhead, but since i also have an account on DeviantArt, with a different pen-name, which is highonwords (stephanie) - i am going to use highonwords here .. more..