boy

a boy with his book of naked pictures,
learns about his body, what it does to him,
he pleases himself, but there is something
hollow with the act until he learns of love
that simple, cosmic thing inside him, around him
that makes him see colors and forget himself for a while,
until the aching in his bones subsides,
and he could hold his breath, return her gaze,
as a polite way of telling the world,
he  could be alone with her, and never be lonely
he'd wait for her, he'd wait for them both to grow roots
grown enough to touch the sky with their tongues,
as if it were a three-word whisper, they have yet to learn,
she is sad for him, he is different, a specimen unnamed,
a misshapened key, that wouldn't unlock her
she doesn't understand dreams; he is a dreamer
he kisses with his eyes, and doesn't jump at her nakedness,
her casual pleas for him to pour some of himself out,
so she could see him, finally see him in the dark ,
where he is just a boy , she could have loved

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting write...she wants the boy again, the one just dreamed, looked at pictures and innocently imagined...and yet he is grown, more reserved...wanting him to pour himself on to her...we grow....and we grow up...and we grow cynical...we hold back more the older we get.
the boy needs to be unleashed.

[highonwords]

thank you, jacob, for the interesting review - i am alwayd glad with your visits - you have such keen poetic eyes

steph

[V]

Oh wow. There are not many writings which leave me sort of speechless but yours did. (Almost). Beautiful, a tad raw in the beginning but turning into something so prettily expressed, it felt almost magical.

[highonwords]

hi vanessa - it was pretty raw and crude even in the middle and end, so i revised and revised before the poem could die on me - thank you so much for the visit and review

steph

[V]

You're welcome. Some pieces are sort of vulnerable to being rewritten again and again, I can tell by experience ^^ Yours turned out to be awesome.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is really beautiful and insightful, with some lovely phrases and images -- a structure that compliments the theme.

[highonwords]

thank you, kl, for the review and the visit - this is a very timid and decent boy - a gentleman - the girl is kinda immature and doesn't share the same dreams, same ideals with him - in the philippines, women are expected to be more conservative

steph

[Lyn Anderson]

yes I realize this. you capture it well. ps I just wrote another poem for you.:)

[Lydia Shutter]

"grown enough to touch the sky with their tongues" What a great line! And another "a three-word whisper"...saying "I Love You" is very scary to some people. A boy grows from looking at centerfolds to seeing the real thing and falling in love. A wonderful write. Lydi**

[highonwords]

this poem started like a child's scrawl on my paper mind - took me a while to write it - also revised it - i think the girl 'though is kinda aggressive versus the timid boy - a girl who doesn't like gentlemen - very sad - i am just the poet, here

steph