the huntsman and his would-be wife

the huntsman and his would-be wife

A Poem by highonwords

while i starve for your love,
for the dowry and white-tent view

i've been feeding you
love notes and edible flowers,

lacing your drinks,
with dollops of my absence

i needed you to get drunk
with lust and longing,

i wanted to draw blood
down your throat to your veins

in a bedroom brawl,
i've been dropping bombs about commitment,

to tame your wild ambivalence
about love, to keep you from straying

to curb your bloodlust
for one-night stands and young girls

but your heart has flown
over the view of a girl by the window,

over the promise of white-picket fences,
over two red-peaked mountains,

between her dark, sloping thighs,
you swallow her whole and alive,

i close my eyes to the distance
between my mark, that is you and me






© 2016 highonwords


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This is a great piece, steph. The subject is relevant, as one-sided love is really difficult for the one who chose to believe it will work. I like the metaphors you used here.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

hi dhaye - thank you for the visit and the review - glad you found it relevant

my be.. read more
"dropping bombs about commitments"

delightfully used metaphors in this piece...second to last and next to last stanzas are so interesting...

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you, jacob, for the visit and comment

steph
No way to make a man...or a woman....do something you feel is right. Forced relationships seldom work. Very emotive words. Sensual lines are good. Again, I am not sure why you separate your lines. The poem would read much more cohesively if you had the lines flowing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

i wanted each line to remain, more like to leave their mark on the reader, that's what's with the li.. read more
Lydia Shutter

8 Years Ago

Steph, while I started out my career as a teacher, I am not one now. I really do not have the time .. read more
highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you, ma'am, for the encouragement

steph
Bravo! You have me sold as a consistent reader of what I consider outstanding poetry. Try to get published, you should have no problems.

Regards,
Al

Posted 8 Years Ago


highonwords

8 Years Ago

thank you, al, actually, it really is my dream to get published someday when the time is right and i.. read more

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NOTE: Formerly my pen-name on this site is letterhead, but since i also have an account on DeviantArt, with a different pen-name, which is highonwords (stephanie) - i am going to use highonwords here .. more..

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