Ghost Story

Sort of experimental, I guess.

My heart is alone, cold, and dead

Where we lived is now an empty shell

Your goodbye song still echoes in my head

Once fiery passion, now flames of my hell

My lips remember the taste of your kiss

My arms tightly embrace the open air

Each memory repeats what I now miss

I think of you as I plunge into despair

The love I had for you has never died

You continue to haunt me every night

To forget you, I have constantly tried

But this phantom of you is always in sight

A ghost of our past with me will forever stay

Tormenting me with what will never be mine

No matter what I do, I cannot ever get away

You linger in my mind, until the end of time

This story has been told time and time again

About a one way love, living past its last breath

And a doomed heart walking the earth in pain

Of childish hopes that are resistant to death

There's a reason why it's so hard to move ahead

It's hard to admit that you no longer belong to me

My memories of you are still burned into my head

As the words of a ghost story become my reality

Author's Note

Might not be that good, this is the first thing I've written in months.

Reviews

[James Darrow]

Very passionate, and very well put together. An excellent read, with the stanza below standing out to me...

A ghost of our past with me will forever stay
Tormenting me with what will never be mine
No matter what I do, I cannot ever get away
You linger in my mind, until the end of time

[Barbara Walker]

I lke the second and fifth stanzas the most.

[realmwriter]

Sure is good to me...I like the juxt of position from I have you, to I had you, to I cant have you. Beautiful mane, really. This speeks to me perhaps more clear than most. I have felt this sentiment I don't knoe how many times...

[Jamie S.]

This was sent to me by my friend christina and Im so glad she did. You obviously need to be writing. This is filled with passion, love and heartache and was a joy to read after shoveling through a boring pile of read requests. So nice to meet you and your writing :)

[Joshua Donahue]

Really good. I could feel the amount of emotion and power your words held. A great read.

[StarSandwich]

Wha! Might not be good?! This was awesome! :) I can feel the emotions of such longing, the realization, the lingering feelings. :)

[Nirmala]

Many, many have love that they hide which haunts them all their lives. They may have two reactions to it – either joy on its memory or sorrow at every reminder. Your poem has gripped it well as a ghost. The following lines are for me the best!


Once fiery passion, now flames of my hell

The love I had for you has never died
You continue to haunt me every night

You linger in my mind, until the end of time

This story has been told time and time again
About a one way love,

There's a reason why it's so hard to move ahead
It's hard to admit that you no longer belong to me
My memories of you are still burned into my head
As the words of a ghost story become my reality

[Chris]

You spoke well...

[SamBug]

Wow, this was so good. So powerful and just good. I have no other words!

[DONALD EISSLER]

quite a mind for someone so young you are very good keep up what your doing spead your talent amongst those less gifted than you i know it will be appreciated by all
TK