Wastelands

What do I have without my heart...? Nothing at all

You're really special, I know that you are the one

I love you with everything I can show

You're my every thought, my nighttime stars, my morning sun

You're my verdant meadows, every pretty flower that can grow

Then you tell me you want something more

Greater than all the things I could provide

I can't process what you're saying, "stay with me" I implore

Then you say "good bye" and you're no longer by my side

What happened to this kingdom we created?

The lush, green forests, leveled down to blistering sands

When I found out it was my love that you hated

You destroyed my world and left me with wastelands

Now I lie here, dying of this intense pain

Bleeding out from this hole you tore in my chest

My heart is a drought that will never see rain

Just because you wanted someone else to be your best

I'm lonely in this desert that scorches my skin

I trudge on for miles in search of assistance

To survive I must keep playing, but I never can win

I see not a hint of hope, not even off in the distance

I gaze up into the sky, wishing someone would care

Slowly grasping at the truth, that I am meant to be alone

I forsake my last hope, and bring in a breath of despair

As I return to these wastelands I call my home

Living here by myself, I began to see a glimpse of my doom

I lie here shivering, freezing to death without your loving embrace

I crawl under a rock, with a twisted desire that it was my tomb

Forever, I search for you in these wastelands, but I find not a single trace...

Author's Note

A poem I made tonight, because I was severely depressed.

Reviews

[Lorraine]

Comparing yourself with a wasteland is pretty harsh in my opinion, but I guess since you were so severely depressed when you wrote it, then it just fits the mood. This analogy set up a higher level of intensity because even without so much explanation, the comparison is very well understandable in an angst-y way.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Nathan Durham]

I changed it abruptly for a reason. I was so happy and then everything changed, and my world was ravaged...

[Alicia™]

The poem in itself is beautiful and heart wrenching, but the first stanza bothers me. It doesn't quite flow smoothly into the second because it's so sudden. Instead, I think you should incorporate that love into bits of the rest of the poem.