Silver Locket

An interesting idea that came to me in a dream. It's about returning to a better time.

Remember one day, not too long ago?

When our paths happened to twist

From that day I would always know

That you would make up for all I missed

I thought you were special, sent from above

A miracle, an angel, a special smile

Someone to drag me into falling in love

Yet again, to follow someone like a child

You know, your presence always felt so great

My cold heart, your warming touch

A vivid fantasy, a dream like state

Was why I always followed you so much...

Then came the time of the great revelation

That some things simply aren't meant to be

I was suddenly sober from my intoxication

When I learned there was no "you and me"

I was crushed, I was choking

I wanted to bleed, I wanted to cry

Trapped in a blaze that carries on smoking

My only hope for consolation was to die...

Then I flashed back to another time

Before I was hurt with what doesn't exist

Before my web of poetry, dripping blood on every line

Before my heart detached itself for this emotional tryst

The time was when you first smiled bright

At something funny I said

The happiness, the hopes and giggles that kept me up at night

I froze that moment in my head

Now I cling to that mental snapshot

Neatly wrapped in a little silvery chain

Now when I'm encroached by remorseful thought

Memories of happier times soothe my pain

Now I keep you in a silver locket

Just like you keep me bound in this emotional rope

Past conversations, aspirations, and your beauty in my pocket

Only preserving my last selfish hope 

Reviews

[Lorraine]

As per usual, you write romance in such vivid and detailed way that is simply touching. I like the idea of clinging to a mental snapshot. There's just something so amazingly sweet in that thought and your writing style just so perfectly matches the theme.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Christina May Shanaberg]

The rhyme, the imagery, the emotion, and the writing are all superb! Where can one start to describe the precious jewel that this poem is. Wonderfully, fantastically, professionally written!

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... i cannot begin to tell you how amazingly magical and comforting this verse is ... you have narrated a beautiful tale with impeccable poetic finesse and care ... this is verse is as much about resilience and hope as it is about love and separation ... i love all the stanzas of this verse but want to applaud you especially for these ...

The time was when you first smiled bright
At something funny I said
The happiness, the hopes and giggles that kept me up at night
I froze that moment in my head

Now I cling to that mental snapshot
Neatly wrapped in a little silvery chain
Now when I'm encroached by remorseful thought
Memories of happier times soothe my pain

Now I keep you in a silver locket
Just like you keep me bound in this emotional rope
Past conversations, aspirations, and your beauty in my pocket
Only preserving my last selfish hope

... the line ... "i froze that moment in my head" ... is one of the most unforgettable lines that i have ever read ... exceptional poetry you write ... exquisite and soulful ...