Parasite

A simple poem about how somebody gets in your mind and stays there feeding off your emotions

I've suffered yet another day

In what seems like a game

It feels like I'm wasting away

Every thought brings on more pain

From the first time we met

You resided in my mind

Ensnaring me in your net

My destruction I soon would find

Sapping away my time for thought

Directing my focus on you

I'm just another victim you caught 

This effect is hardly new

The same has happened in the past

Being drained away by a parasite

Each one more beautiful than the last

Leading me on until I lose the will to fight

You occupy thoughts that should be mine

And then I start to scream

Alone I thought I would be fine

But you are still in my dream

You keep me trapped inside my desire

Leeching off my heart, blocking out the light

You're as cold as ice, but keep me under fire

Despite all this, I love you my parasite

Author's Note

I hope you like this

Reviews

[Lanky]

I don't like this. I EFFIN LOVE IT! I felt a lot like this in my freshman year of high school. The way you describe it brought all those memories flooding back and i love that. I love the way you write and i love the emotions you convey. The ending is incredibly strong and makes for a perfect conclusion. You have an incredible amount of talent and i plan to read more of your works in the future!

[Lorraine]

Great analogy. I can feel the acidity of comparing a loved one into a parasite. It's the same as saying nothing good comes from that person. I just find it twisted and ironic to claim love for a parasite. "Despite all this, I love you my parasite"==> though the words are simple, it's a very intense declaration.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[~Daugher of the King~]

The analogy to the parasite is very clever!

I really like this stanza:

"You occupy thoughts that should be mine
And then I start to scream
Alone I thought I would be fine
But you are still in my dream"

But I also like a lot of the others, too! Lol. I picked that stanza because I can relate to it. I think about my ex-boyfriend more often than I care to admit because thoughts of him get stuck in my mind all the time, every day.

I really like this stanza, too:

"Sapping away my time for thought
Directing my focus on you
I'm just another victim you caught
This effect is hardly new"

That can be so true!

Also, I like your reference: "Ensnaring me in your net."

Keep up the good work! I hope you can publish your writings some day... if you haven't already! Lol. If you ever do, let me know because I will buy your book! :D Lol.

[Gheeneil]

This is so true. Why could someone create that kind of effect on us when, in turn, he/she didnt even care about us? But then again, this circumstance exists. I can very well relate to this. Keep writng.

[S. Allison (Ferrante) S..]

I can easily relate to this. You write with emotions and you convey them well. Displaced feelings that we don't know how to share can sometimes be our strongest muse. I love this poem and look forward to reading more of your work.

[RyannCarrie]

i think this was great! i love the descriptions of how they made you feel.

[karmic]

The word “pain” came to mind as I read this poem. It is filled with such intense emotion. Great piece.

[pilotofwar]

holy crap dude this is great