The Dance With Death

A sonnet. How once I longed for that beautiful doom

Lay me to rest my dearest damsel death,

the one who has taunted me oft with ease

Free me from this vexed reluctance of breath

so we may join hands in eternities.

How you tease your frigid lips of disease;

although robust, I've longed for the cold kiss.

I dreamt that we danced to dark melodies

under those moonlit markers of abyss.

Twas pure bliss on that eve we wasted clock

While we twisted to the lull of the tombs.

My heart stopped as we coalesced and locked

...forevermore, I'll loathe that beat's resume...

Again we'll meet, and that night let us live

For mourning, a wake no one can forgive

Reviews

[DeliriousCerises]

Wow, I can't believe no one has reviewed this yet. It's quite beautiful, which funny enough is a word I don't often use to describe poetry. This makes me think of someone yearning to die, but can't quite bring upon themselves the act of suicide. So instead they dream of that temptation. You delicately presented each thought of death in a romantic sense, just wonderful. "taunted me oft with ease" oh the gift that death truly gives, life can just be so damn hard at times. I enjoyed the bit of ironic humor "and that night let us live" and that last statement is so powerful "for mourning a wake no one can forgive." I wish I could do this poem more justice in my review, but know it's very well crafted, in my opinion.

[Chirag Kumar]

Dark and slow. A wonderful poem. :)

[Daughter of Darkness]

This is so perfect. I myself can actually relate. Keep writing.

[Rick Puetter]

Another wonderful write with excellent message and language.

Greatly enjoyed.

Rick

[Lyric]

Wow, this is really gorgeous, and dark, amazing job

[Mara]

wow! Your choice of words are amazing
This poem is truly beautiful

[KanaDream]

This is an amazing poem that paints vivid pictures in the reader's mind. I can see the darkness in the words and it's really beautiful. Keep dreaming.

[Vanesa Markovic]

A beautiful poem!
Why do I always find such beauty in the macabre?!
I admire any work that can paint death in such a charming and romantic light.
We need a little light around her, she is what gives meaning to all of this.
-VM

[N. Van Avery]

This is great! I really liked it. I'm not a poet, therefore, I cannot offer you any tips on how to make it better. but I liked it!

[Tanushvi]

It is one of the most beautiful pieces of work i have encountered so far. It grips the reader. As a reader i could feel what the poet is feeling... 'Damsel death' a very well used alliteration...
"How you tease your frigid lips of disease-
Although robust, I've longed for the cold kiss."
It is the most vivid description of someone in pain wanting death, desperate to be freed from the suffering...

[Justin Littlefield]

Wow thank you! I feel that when you're in a situation as I was when I wrote this, death isn't something you fear, it's almost beautiful in a way

[Tanushvi]

I am sorry that you had to be in a situation where you preferred death over life... i hope you're never in that sort of a situation again... :)

[Dennis A. Clark]

First place:

Your sonnet tops the chart; it has no flaw.
Your skill, second to none, holds me in awe.