Two knitted hats

dedicated to my mom~ I really appreciate all the time, love, and other sacrifices you have devoted to me.

My mom, knitting in the corner
Knits away the endless time in Canada
The day stretch out blankly before her
Knitting, occupies her hands

 

My mom, knitting in the corner
On her head, there is a knitted hat
Covering up her boldness
Knitting, banishes her pain

 

My mom, knitting in the corner
Hears the ringing of the phone
The once respectful teacher of an elementary school
Flinches.
The conversation is incomprehensible to her
Knitting, engulfs her with blessed emptiness

 

My mom, knitting in the corner,
Swallows back tears of homesickness
Her job of thirty years,
Our house, her “real” home
Gone, all gone
Knitting, grants her a brief relief from memories

 

My mom, knitting in the corner, always
With one in her hands
Another on her head
Always, always
Then, she unravels.

Reviews

[laceyjane23]

very powerful piece! i love the last line, "then she unravels" thats a powerful line. great job!
laceyjane

[Blue Sky]

Always, always
Then, she unravels.

a very written piece
clear and vivid what the mother replaces
'Knitting in the corner' reminds
of the Jack Horner nursesy rhymes
you did a wonderful job imbuing feelings to the reader,
it's just excellent!! Great work!!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

oh man, great poem, little one, ---mishel

[Barbara Walker]

Great metaphor and this poem's words reflect the sadness in the change of your Mom from someone who took care of a house and all that entails to being startled by the sound of the phone. Good write Joy. Barbara

[Celtic Cat]

Gah, this hurts to the core. It truly just ripped my heart out. I'll try not to leave any blood stains on the way out. (((hugs)))

[justink :):)]

wow great unexpected ending i love it and i think it is a great tribute the way u worded it and the way it flows i think it is a great piece of writing and the way it tell the story of your mother by the way it sounds i think she is just wonderful

great write much lov justin:):)

[Thanh]

i love it.great job

[Laughing Lunatic]

It made me cry.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

poignant, sad write. great tribute to your mother. nicely done.

[Blake Q Hatfield]

I think the poem shows a child's love and admiration for their mother. Empathy for her loss, her saddness, wanting her to be happy again, like when she excapes to knitting. Well done.