HE

He is a man and that is not who he is


He is ‘funny’

He is ‘sociable’

He is ‘clever’

He can be ‘anything he wants to be �" if he just applies himself’

He only seems to know what he doesn’t want to be

He is a deep pool of fizzy dark water


He is the all-knowing idiot, the sad joker and the lost explorer

He is becoming increasingly complicated and is afraid

He is strongly vulnerable and comfortable in his insecure skin

He is secretly angry, quietly judging and ashamed of it all

He is filled with nothingness and everything, all at the same time

He is swimming in unconscious ignorance and is consciously desperate to reflect

He is chasing an ideal whilst constantly questioning its reality

He wants the unfathomable being that he is; to be understood , yet doesn’t understand himself


He feels lost in a complex world he has created for himself

He demands answers he can’t give to his own complex questions

He is trying to do the right thing and is self-righteous

He is coping and struggling

He is desperate and pathetic


He is an oxymoron; a walking contradiction


He is lukewarm �" He is tired


Can you see him?


“He is me”

The ‘Good Man’ (2015)

Reviews

[Richard Helbert]

very nice i think there are many that can relate to this one, i like the words you used and the way that things read out it was for me very readable and enjoyable

[wezev511]

Thanks so much Richard. Such nice comments!

[Crazycatgirl_10]

I think this could apply to every person in the world. Very good.

[wezev511]

Thanks for your comment, much appreciated.

[Matching Socks]

It's not just 'this' man but every man and woman has or will feel this in their lives.
Good honest writing. Enjoyed very much.

[wezev511]

Thanks Ana, I am happy you enjoyed it. :)

[MomzillaNC]

The dichotomy of the modern man. Well penned. The repetition really drives the piece. Terrific line: "He is the all-knowing idiot, the sad joker and the lost explorer"

NOTES: Now, I always advise remembering that "Whi-iate spa-ace is yo-our free-iend!" (Imaging the thick Texas drawl of the teacher who said this to us ad nauseam). However, here I think you may have over used it a bit. I recommend single spacing each stanza, and double-spacing between stanzas. I also recommend you increase the font size to at least 14 point. I'd also recommend changing the font face to Helvetica for your san-serif font face; it's a more open and easier to read font face than WC's default. Times or Georgia are decent serif font faces.

[wezev511]

Thankyou very much for your review... your feedback is both valued and useful! :)
I will try the changes in composition you have suggested

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I happy I could be helpful.

[blue angel]

I very much like this piece. A sinking feeling washes over me with each coming line. That raw and certain desperation that repeatedly gasps for relief, and release -- the illusive, yet ultimate resolution! Thanks for sharing - Respectfully, blue angel

[wezev511]

What great feedback... thank you very much.

[blue angel]

You're very welcome. :)

[A Ghost of Myself]

I think you just described every man, at least on some level; for 'this' man, it seems like he's found himself, but not yet ready to accepted it. "This is me."

[wezev511]

Thank you... I like that you see commonalities. And I appreciate your insight

[Stephen]

I really like this. I feel in many ways, I relate to the things said about this man. But like your comment on my writing, I want to be accepted for who I am and not for something someone wants me to be. Thanks

[wezev511]

i`m glad you can relate to it and actually, "he" is growing to accept himself :)

[Stephen]

I see, that makes sense, for I have not fully accepted myself, and we cant do that, then how can we expect others to. You got the wheels in brain turning today, thanks!

[wezev511]

Yes, mine too!

[NeiL ArandA]

There's so much paradox about this man or person . But on the contrary he seems to be transparent and like an open to someones eyes ...Yes ...at least he knows ... I heard so many people says Do not judge so you won't be judge . The muse or persona on this piece is judging or taking an inventory of himself . And aradio preacher said that of we do we won't be judge ...

[wezev511]

Yes, definitely self judgement Neil. I like your way of referring to it as self inventory.
Thank you for your comment

[NeiL ArandA]

Just my simple take . My pleasure to read .

[Valentine]

He sounds like the typical male, nothing more or nothing less. Most people over emphasize themselves. We all are just people trying. Valentine

[wezev511]

Is that a reaction, review or judgement? :)

[Vanesa Markovic]

"He" sounds fascinating.
-VM

[wezev511]

Thanks, So does she...