Nice use of imagery to bury your misery and I feel bad that your soul wants revenge. It makes me ponder the question of whether our soul is separate from us and can seek revenge. I sure hope not. I like to think we are our souls and the physical is guided by the spiritual. On the other hand maybe perhaps we do battle with our "other" selves at times. Nice imagery.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Thank you, Gregory. Sorry I missed this one, but I'm happy you enjoyed it so.
I love how your word choices seem to hug the sound of an old elizabethan style lament while also reading in a more straightforward & easy-to-visualize way like modern poetry. I love the title line & the way you wove it into your other verses. I love the way you wind around slowly to make a detailed point that ends in the title-line sentiments (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Thanks Margie. I started using this style a couple of times. The other was called Little Thief. Most.. read moreThanks Margie. I started using this style a couple of times. The other was called Little Thief. Most of my better poetry does just that, curves the old around the new.
The strange thing though, which I think has nothing to with each other as far as subjects, is how I was thinking thoughts that list above, but the rhythm came to me when I was listening to this Karen Elson song called Thief At My Door. If you haven't heard her, you should give her a listen. I listen to a lot of easy-listening type of music when I write, and Miss Elson found me at the right time and the right rhythm.
I thank you, as always, for a wonderful and wordy review, but we should also thank her for that wonderful ditty that found me in the right place at the right time.
5 Years Ago
It was this song. She has such a peaceful voice.
https://www.youtube.com/watc.. read moreIt was this song. She has such a peaceful voice.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B3X99aHp7_g
5 Years Ago
Okay, the coffee's kicking in now. I was mistaken it wasn't the thief at my door that inspired this .. read moreOkay, the coffee's kicking in now. I was mistaken it wasn't the thief at my door that inspired this rhythm (that song inspired Little Thief), it was her song Stolen Roses that inspired this rhythm.
here it is
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8wd0i85dync
5 Years Ago
I like this song . . . it reminds me of what we used to call "folk music" (which I would sing while .. read moreI like this song . . . it reminds me of what we used to call "folk music" (which I would sing while playing guitar back in the old days)! Thanks for sharing!
Her entire album The Ghost Who Walks is like musical gold to me.
She and Caroline LaVelle hav.. read moreHer entire album The Ghost Who Walks is like musical gold to me.
She and Caroline LaVelle have that peaceful soul, even when they right dark, that tranquilizes me and makes me want to sit in a corner somewhere, drooling poetry into my notebook.
5 Years Ago
Thank you for turning me on to this music . . . I'll listen to more of it later when my internet pla.. read moreThank you for turning me on to this music . . . I'll listen to more of it later when my internet plan lets me stream without limit . . .
Wesley, this is an alternate twist to the body and soul as one, to the soul's separation (or bisection) from the body. You've expressed your thoughts nicely in a nice rhythmic poetic form. This almost sounds like the lyrics to a song. Great job and keep writing. I enjoyed it immensely. :-)
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1 Year Ago
Thank you Tamara. Forgive me for not seeing this until a few years later. I dont know how this went .. read moreThank you Tamara. Forgive me for not seeing this until a few years later. I dont know how this went under my radar but I am glad tonight that you enjoyed it then.
Thank you for reading and have a wonderful new year.
Great imagery inside this thought-provoking poem. That makes us ponder the questions of does the soul seek or want revenge?
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5 Years Ago
Thanks Dawn. Honestly, as a person who, in another life, suffered from depression, I considered as I.. read moreThanks Dawn. Honestly, as a person who, in another life, suffered from depression, I considered as I wrote this, what if that's what happened?
What if depression is the soul coming back for revenge?
Probably sounds nutty, but existentially, it apparently made for a good poem.
Really enjoyed this. Dark beauty at it's best. The opening set the scene perfectly.
There once was a time
When I sought to try
And bury my soul
Deep within the soil,
Beneath a darkened sky.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, BBP. It had been so long, when i wrote this, since i had written anything darkly. i wonde.. read moreThank you, BBP. It had been so long, when i wrote this, since i had written anything darkly. i wondered for a while if i could still do it again. it's strange how darkness never really dies, even when you're happy in life.
I guess it's weird for me to say, but some times i need to write something dark like this, just to remind myself that life can be really bright.
Nice use of imagery to bury your misery and I feel bad that your soul wants revenge. It makes me ponder the question of whether our soul is separate from us and can seek revenge. I sure hope not. I like to think we are our souls and the physical is guided by the spiritual. On the other hand maybe perhaps we do battle with our "other" selves at times. Nice imagery.
Posted 6 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
Thank you, Gregory. Sorry I missed this one, but I'm happy you enjoyed it so.
A solid work of spirituality that inspires and never expires. The only constant is change as a wise man said before and the only way out is listen to the voice and feel the presence of the divine and heed His commands as you marvelously state.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Sam, my friend. I love that you liked it.
Nice story/poem. Nice solid and ephemeral images.
I particularly liked the last lines;
"Woe in the wake of a soul
Who knows vengeful delight." Keep up the good work. Earl
I was born in Central Alabama February 27, 1985. I'm a Piscean and love it.
I began writing poetry and child stories at age nine. I began home schooling after the Sixth Grade, having a lot of troub.. more..