mrs perfect

some people no matter how much you correct they think they are always right

she is so good
everyone say so, she said
she knows when to speak
and when to act
but everything she ever said,did
was wrong

Author's Note

please comment and criticize are welcome,i hope you enjoy this

Reviews

[zunie frost]

Such short write and really cute
I like the way you put your idea in such short. Words
Nicely written

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks zunie

[Sangeetha]

Well that's really cute talks about all them fajers out ther...well done and I agree with you completely

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks sangeetha

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct words. Confident can make your view seem right even when you are wrong. I enjoyed the honest tone and the good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks coyote truly people will think you right because of the confidence you portray but been confident on a wrong idea is bad it wont make you learn more

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right and you are welcome.

[barleygirl]

I love the way you've painted a recognizable picture in very few words, & using simple words, at that. The reader's own experiences can fill in the blanks.

The only thing I don't like so much is the last word. To me, your poem describes someone who is false, not so much being wrong. Or another possibility -- Mrs. Perfect is being untrue to herself. This would paint Mrs. Perfect with understanding, instead of the judgmental sound of being "wrong" . . .

These are the little tweaks that can give a poem like this even deeper meaning.

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks for the review.i will work on the point you mentioned

[freaksheet]

It's pretty good. Sounds like about half the girls in my school. I'm not 100% sure of your message, but this is still an excellent poem!

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks,its message is about false people who believe they are always right.

[hcarson]

this is the case with most people that think they know everything, they normally end up knowing the least!! i know a few like this at the moment, their arrogence usually catches up with them in the end, well done on a good little piece, short but true! :)

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks friend am glad you like it

[Autonomous]

I don't know if it is the structure or the phrasing but something is making it hard to understand your message. anyway its still good.

[Shankar Mohan Singh]

I believe it is the punctuation in this, a little edit can do wonders, anyways thoughts are good just rearrange. I hope you find this useful :)

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks for the correction