101 Searching For One Day

I wanted to see the blue sky
But there are dark clouds instead
Blocking out the shining Sun
The heat taking away by the cold

So I took a walk to the river
Throwing stones in the water
The anger raging up inside me
And I scream out to the World
"Why can't I have one day"?

I wanted to hear the birds sing
The wind was keeping them away
If only I heard their beautiful chorus
But the howl was making them silent

So I took a walk to the broken down mill
Kicked at the crumbling down wall
Taking out all of my frustration
And I shout out to a deaf planet
"Why can't I have one day"?

I thought of the woman that I love
Of the time when we will be together
Even though the days seem like years
Before I can be with her once again

So I took a walk through my dreams
Where I knew she would be waiting
Ridding these troubles in my head
And I say to her a promise to keep
"We will be together again one day"


copyright Chris Smith 17th May 2011       

Reviews

[Ashley]

the way this flowed from one want to another was absolutely flawless. the imagery emotion and desires are beautifully expressed. the ending is a perfect and seamless fit, as it seems that sometimes we have to go inside ourselves to get what we want...even if it is a fleeting dream

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and powerful wishes in your poem. I understand the emotion. Hard sometimes to want something and so damn far away. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[M.Babu]

This had such dribbling sentiment...it was like sitting in a bobbing ship. The flow was nice and the thought behind it was also commendable. What a tale...still drifting in my mind:)

Nicely done my friend.

~M.Babu~

[Sel Whiteley]

Ah the elusive one day longed-for perfection which true love promises. This is so sensitively drawn and so tender, lovely.

[SpokenWord]

It is the hope of one day being together that eases the frustration level. We can often find solace in the memories we hold dear and the hope for a brighter tomorrow. Your style is always flawless and your topic is heart felt throughout.

[Tamalthor]

great poem love how you wrote it! very deep and descriptive!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the frustration is palpable throughout and then there at the end you insert the soft pulse of hope~

[Sourav]

Beautiful. Wonderful piece of writing!

[Kathryn]

Lovely words that sound straight from the soul. Great work, well done:)

[Hello, Goodbye]

YES.
Loved this collection of words, they echo similar notions found in my own soul..